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5/11/22, 11:58 PM
Grand Finale *Applause*
5/9/22, 10:22 AM
I love the premise of this story, but the mode of narration doesn't do much for me. I know I say this a lot, but this is the kind of story that would work better if told from the victim's perspective. The main reason is that then we'd get some dramatic conflict; right now, everything is going way too easily for the narrator; he describes his plan in great detail, and it seems to be going off without a hitch. In fact, because the men he's brainwashing are so passive, it sometimes feels like he's monologuing in front of two mannequins. I feel like the best thing you could do for the next chapter would be to switch to a new narrator--perhaps a server who skipped the first couple of days of (re)orientation and is coming back to a very new bar, one that initially confuses and even frightens him.

EntrancedGay92
5/9/22, 11:44 PM
@Hypnothrill thanks for your helpful insight, as always. I have to admit I had lost interest in this series for a while, so I know that comes across in this chapter. I'd sat on this for a good two years editing bits and pieces. I finally decided to just put it out here.

5/10/22, 3:53 AM
@EntrancedGay92 I've definitely had that experience before, working on a story just to finish it, even when I'm not really into it anymore. But I do think that all the set-up is great, and there are a lot of fun ways you can take the story from here, but it would work a lot better if you don't insist on having the MC narrate every chapter.

5/11/22, 10:43 PM
@EntrancedGay92 im actually very excited for this series and how it will move forward! I hope you will continue it :)
5/11/22, 10:12 PM
God you are such an amazing writer. Brilliant chapter!!
Azuri Foxcoon
5/11/22, 8:27 PM
I loved all of if. The reenacting of the encounter…the love…the drama, all so very wonderful. It’s very good. I always love reading your stories! Keep it up ❤️
5/11/22, 8:01 PM
I loved the main introduction of the villain, and the role play too. So sad this series is drawing to a close.
5/11/22, 2:04 PM
I agree with the other comments. I do love some dark and fucked up shit. However, I don't think this was the site for the story. The hetero aspects detract severely from the sexiness. I think you should have altered it to have been too older men luring the young guy in with their shelf. Or maybe not posted it on this site at all. No offense. You're writing is very good. Just not what I want to read to get off. I mean, there isn't even a straight sex tag on this site after all because it doesn't belong on the site.

Martin
5/11/22, 3:21 PM
@Ragnarok Just as a comment from the Approver's team: We had a discussion about that. We agree that this story doesn't really fit on GSS, the amount of straight sex is just too much. Unfortunately, it was already approved when the discussion started, and I didn't want to deny the approval retroactively. I added the tag "straight" and "straight sex", so everyone can filter these tags to make sure not to be confronted with this. In the future we will be more strict. The occasional straight intercourse embedded in a mostly gay story is fine, but the stories have to remain predominantly gay.

5/11/22, 3:55 PM
@Martin @Ragnarok I totally understand, and I appreciate your letting the story stand. I wondered how much of an issue it would be. I've also submitted the story at mcstories dot com, but I wanted to post it here too because, as a bi guy, I've always felt that on the predominantly straight sites, there's a stigma attached to stories featuring MF and MM action. A lot of non-queer readers seem to get squicked by MM in a way that makes you sorry you even wrote the story at all. That goes doubly so for _dark_ stories featuring MM. The dark vibe I'm going for is primarily inspired by AgainstMyWill's work, and my thought was that by posting here, I might find other queer readers looking for the same hit I'm always seeking. I love Will's stuff, but besides the obvious fact that I've reread all of his stories more times than I can count, I have a real itch that needs scratching in that I also want to see hapless women utterly ruined by obscene sexual urges the same way the men in his stories are. (That didn't happen in this one, but you can obviously tell it's foreshadowed in the event of a sequel.) From here on out, I will make sure stories I post here feature very limited MF sex, as per Martin's comment, if there's any at all. (If any other bi/pan/flexible guys are seeking more dark stories with cock _and_ pussy, feel free to drop me an email at effedupess@gmail.com — maybe we can find a dedicated space for us.) Thank you to everyone for the positive and constructive feedback, and feel free to keep it coming!

Martin
5/11/22, 4:05 PM
@Fucked-Up Shit Thank you very much for understanding. I just don't want to be as exclusive as many straight sites and people are, that's why all kinds of sexual combinations are welcome in general. cis, trans, queer in any way... and even straight (gasp). But almost all readers here are looking for stories about men, their dicks and asses, so this has to remain the major point of the stories posted here. :kissing_heart:
5/11/22, 4:04 PM
I really enjoy this series more and more
5/11/22, 4:39 AM
This is indeed some fucked-up shit, and I kind of love it! Really well-written, and I like that you're not afraid to go to some really dark places.

5/11/22, 3:29 PM
@Hypnothrill Thank you! As a fan of your work, I really appreciate that.
5/11/22, 3:27 PM
很喜欢这个网站和你的小说,谢谢
5/11/22, 3:19 PM
Muy buena... me pregunto que pasara ahora 🤔