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5/7/22, 12:53 PM
Great story!
5/7/22, 11:58 AM
GodDAMN that was fucking explosively hot! Love to read about guys giving in to the urge to dominate. Excellent work as usual, sir!
5/5/22, 8:18 AM
Hot story, there was an error in displaying the word length so I resubmitted it. Definitely hyped to see where this story goes for sure.

5/7/22, 10:55 AM
@Norismo thank you for doing that :)
5/6/22, 9:40 PM
Not since Morgan Blackthorne's 'A Breed Apart' have I read such well-crafted prose about debasement, desperate craven sluttiness, and unwitting mental transformation/enslavement. Bravo!! I encourage you to write more.

5/7/22, 10:55 AM
@Rock Creek Werewolf with comments like that, of course I will. You keep my writer's fuel burning ;)
JR
5/7/22, 10:50 AM
Love this story. I can’t wait until the next chapter.
5/7/22, 10:41 AM
Not sure if like papa or not. Sure mildred wasn't good but is just a divorce impossible? And things were fine with the new livers. This feels much like mildred. Warping identity to fulfill own design Oh fuck this is hiddy, fun, hot Sad not his real dad. But i suppose improvement Naybe Man this confusing
5/7/22, 8:04 AM
Hell yeah!!! Oh wowwowowowowow I did NOT see that coming! 🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩

5/7/22, 10:30 AM
@NeedControlling thanks man!
5/7/22, 10:10 AM
Hah, orgy, bondage, ghost attack, mixed with puss orgy polymarriage So...danny was always super and or magic, its not just the town?
5/7/22, 10:03 AM
Sorry I didn't get a chance to comment earlier when you shared the draft with me, but I think this is really good stuff! I always like a good personality change and dumbing down story, and I think this one is well-done, giving us a good feel for John's transformation into Johnnie. I only had two suggestions: 1) Be more generous with the paragraph breaks. When you have dialogue from two different characters in the same paragraph, it becomes hard to tell them apart. 2) Sometimes the dialogue seems less "dumbed down" and more "working-class characters from a 1950s movie." So just think carefully about your word choices. The story ends up going to some really hot places, so I'd expect a lot of positive reader feedback coming your way!
5/7/22, 9:38 AM
I am so sorry never gave your work focus deserves. Feels like the oerfect gay version if calving signs/cristina price/Charles wallace The tension he is spiraling more But also so sweet