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Anonymous
4/28/22, 10:07 AM
Are… is this… Muscle Twilight?

4/28/22, 2:56 PM
Oh god lol I didn’t think about the similarities. Going forward it won’t fall in line so much
4/28/22, 2:10 PM
Loved this so much! Pheromone stories are amazing and I was able to relate to that foot lust completely since I consider it more of a weakness, myself! I hope we get a part 2!
4/28/22, 1:25 PM
Really well written and really inventive. You were right, you do write wholesome stuff, just mixed in with sadness to. Like bittersweet chocolate.

Anonymous
4/28/22, 1:59 PM
@Norismo I’ll take it! 😊
4/28/22, 1:48 PM
Wow, this was so sad! So, so sad. Remarkably well written, this story made me feel things and will linger with me for a while. I have to say, is Pops the guard from before? I got the impression he was but if so, where is the son? Maybe I'll need to reread it.

Anonymous
4/28/22, 1:58 PM
@Norismo No, Pops is just the buyer of the defunct Gorilla; ‘the worker’ is just someone who quite his job for emotional reasons. Also, same with the “lingering”. Some of your work opened my brain up in ways I didn’t know there was hinges.
4/28/22, 12:08 PM
looking forewords to the next chapters
4/27/22, 7:29 PM
I like where this is going, if I may make a suggestion, why not setting Justin and Brian up as a couple?

Willie Cici
4/28/22, 2:58 AM
@darkblade2814 Keep reading!

4/28/22, 11:32 AM
@Willie Cici okay
4/28/22, 10:40 AM
This was beautiful and heart warming. The happy end we were all looking for, the depiction of body dysmorphia and the interesting concept of Avon - a country without gender, you managed to tie it all together in a cathartic final chapter. This was a rough story, a roller-coaster of emotions. Were I live, Sunday is the first day of the work week, and yet your story was so captivating that I was excited when Sundays came. Thank you!

4/28/22, 10:58 AM
@Reader Thanks for all your comments and feedback. Sorry for any anxiety along the way :sweat_smile: At least it all worked out well in the end.
4/28/22, 10:54 AM
Fantastic story and idea. Hot!!!
4/28/22, 10:07 AM
Oh wow. What a weird wholesome ending! You definitely have a unique style. I can't help but think this would be a fun series, attaching and detatching, wacky hikinks ensue... :laughing:
Tyrol
4/28/22, 8:29 AM
I would literally purchase this with real money in print. I love this story so much. Are you genderqueer? I've been questioning my gender for some time and this story has kinda put the nail in the coffin of my cis-ness. Few erotic mediums have such high quality content that hits that gender fantasy for me like this does. Like when I explained to people "This erotica is so sexy. There's only boys and men and most of the boys end up getting transformed into guys with pussies and tits and they lose all their facial and body hair." I think my friends were confused because to them that literally describes a girl. I could feel them asking without asking "but aren't you gay?" And yes I am and idk where the line is where my brain decides someone is attractive in a boy way or not but I myself would like to be in that zone of confusion. Anyway I wouldn't change anything about the story beats and most of the erotic bits. I would have liked to see more of Jake's life at the end, especially if it ended up with more brotherly love ahem, but I understand why you wrapped it up the way you did. Really hope you design a new epic tale and that it's just as gender wonky as this one. I wish I had the patience to go this hardcore on my own stories.

4/28/22, 9:44 AM
@Tyrol Firstly, please feel free to reach out to me if you want to talk further about how this story made you feel. I will respond to DM's on Twitter or messages here. That goes for anyone else to shy to put a comment on here. I am happy to talk to anyone about the gender themes in this story and your response to them in a confidential way. I have had many people reach out to me for some years now mostly on Twitter who feel "gender wonky" (I love that expression) so I am used to that. I think the main thing to say is that you are not alone feeling that. Secondly, thanks for your comments and this feedback. I have been mostly writing rubbish on my blog for years now. I started off with Tumblr captions, then stories and now this epic! I feel as a writer I have developed, but like anyone I have self-doubt about what I do and am my own worst critic. Having a great collaborator like Lloyd helped me push this to what it became. However, your feedback and that of others has really made the effort of writing something like this worthwhile. Thanks again.