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4/23/22, 3:05 AM
I thought you did good in setting up Cory's just deserts and following through with all the changes that entail in him becoming Bruno. A dumb, overgrown, foreign brute who's a freak in his own way but thankfully sidesteps the potentially problematic issues of a transformation into some other sort of member of a freak show... So freaking hot. I also love seeing dumb muscular brutes being subs to smaller men, either their bottoms or tops. Wonder if the site has a tag for small tops, big bottoms. I wish you lingered more on Bruno trying to hold on to Cory and objecting and fighting the changes, and suggested more about the conditions he'd live in in his new life. Personally, I've long wanted to write a carnival transformation myself, and this inspired me to think some more on how I can set up my own carnival story, with the victims becoming a strongman, and a tattooed man, and maybe conjoined twins and a super tall man...

4/23/22, 3:25 AM
@BODriver I'll take that into account for my next piece, I honestly enjoy embellishing but my main concern was that I am too indulgement with my descriptions. I am glad to know people are interested in my victim's mental states because I will gladly take my time with it in the future.
4/23/22, 3:02 AM
Right. Now I’m now up to date.
4/23/22, 2:38 AM
This is very well written, erotic without being blatantly pornographic (not that there's anything wrong with that!) and with a voice similar to the fairy tales I read as a kid. Extremely enjoyable.
4/23/22, 2:32 AM
As soon as I saw Nasir's name, especially after "Antikythera Mechanism" all I could think of is, "are his copper ingots going to be good quality?"
4/16/22, 6:42 PM
Love this story. Would love to see more with the clone(s) :)

4/16/22, 7:27 PM
Sorry, no clones. The purpose of the clones is to replace the originals and take their place in life so no one notices that they're missing

Anonymous
4/18/22, 4:41 AM
@Fire302 - But that increases the population by 1/4

4/18/22, 7:36 AM
Oh shit your right, I didn’t think about that until you brought it up. I guess copying a person would increase the population, I don’t know how to fix this. But then again do you think Thanos thought his plan through?

Anonymous
4/23/22, 1:04 AM
@Fire302 - I'd assume the clones get recycled by getting re-cast as new men whenever their genetic counterpart gets placed with a master.
Anonymous
4/22/22, 11:52 PM
So hot. It’ll be fun to see if he keeps hanging out with other guys, even if he knows what it’ll do them. Maybe he eventually goes to see a doctor and the doctor ends up with a little more latex on than his gloves.
Will Ryder
4/22/22, 11:02 PM
Gr8 idea with Pink🧡K lol! 🤣 It's gonna be 🌟FUN🌟 reading what other effects it has on our young, teenage hero ✨👨✨ BTW: Nice use of the archaic language - Gosh Darn It..! 😉

4/22/22, 11:03 PM
@Will Ryder Thanks the client really wanted it to be Silver Age Superboy, so I got to have some fun with it.
4/22/22, 10:04 PM
Just another perfectly normal day for Nasir. Wonder what another turn of the crank would bring?
4/22/22, 8:32 PM
this story was pretty fun, it deserves a sequel
4/17/22, 2:21 AM
The humiliation in the story is very present, but is it erotic humiliation or just humiliation? By the end of this chapter I was kind of rooting for the main character to put pool cleaner in Mark's coffee. Was anything about Mark's offer sincere, or was this all just a plot to have a humiliation slave? I'm not sure I would give this story another chapter of my attention to find out. It kind of lost me by this point. My only suggestion would be to either vary the action, or move the story along. I do not think you will have readers for 9-10 chapters of this story unless something happens or progresses to change the situation.

D&D
4/22/22, 8:29 PM
@amul Thanks for your comment. Mark will remain an ambiguous figure in the next chapter as well, but will start to reveal his intentions in the fifth. These chapters were used more to make Luke fall into despair and surrender to fate, from the next he will begin to be more active, or rather passive.