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Will Ryder
4/17/22, 7:11 AM
I'm 💬SPEECH😶LESS💬 Another brilliant chapter 📖 I 💖 how impressed & in LO💟E/L👅ST the narrator is with Sammy 🥰 This is a gr8 series👍
Will Ryder
4/17/22, 6:25 AM
‼️AWES🤩ME‼️ John's conversion was well handled but it's Sammys growing ⚡💥DOM😈STREAK💥⚡ That is 🌟💥MAGNIFICENT💥🌟 2 read 📖😘📖
Will Ryder
4/17/22, 5:37 AM
👉@stimle👈 Eli's conversion was: 🔥THE😈BE(A)ST🔥 (so far) Looking 4ward 2 how it plays out with 💪John😘
Will Ryder
4/17/22, 5:00 AM
Great set-up 👍😁👍 I 💗 how 😡DOM😡 Sammy has becum. Can't wait 2 see how it plays out in the next chapter 📖
Will Ryder
4/17/22, 3:38 AM
‼️HOLY😇SH *T‼️ Sammy breeding his older bro Eli was: 🔥H🥵T AS F**K🔥 Particularly in the end where he owns him👍 Can't wait 2 read what happens 2 their 🐺Alpha🐺 bro John.
4/17/22, 12:20 AM
I always come back to this story from time to time. I love it so much, one of the best you have <3

4/17/22, 3:37 AM
@Udems aww glad u like it udems, that makes me happy to hear.❤
4/17/22, 3:04 AM
Can't wait for the next one!!!!!!
4/16/22, 8:51 AM
Great story with a lot of possibilities on direction but would definitely include public humiliation.

Rubber_Lover14
4/17/22, 3:03 AM
@OralSub Thank you so much for the comment ^^ i might be able to work some public humiliation into a future chapter, or maybe him being secretly toyed with while he's in public? Who knows. Anyways, Thanks for the comment and suggestion 😁
4/16/22, 11:30 AM
Definitely continue - The possibilities for humiliation in public and amongst all his 'friends' is enormous - also the scope for further transformation and enslavement of these friends is wide.

Rubber_Lover14
4/17/22, 2:48 AM
@SPLRUB thanks for the comment! Seeing how many people seem to have enjoyed it, I might begin a second part some time in the future, after the next part of _A Jocks Karma_
4/17/22, 1:08 AM
I will comment on some good parts and some areas that could be improved. The good: The premise is interesting and compelling. The kinky, domineering benefactor who wants to improve the body of the main character while also taking pleasure in the discomfort and humiliation that he causes is hot. Hottest part of the story. The means of exerting control, by playing on the precarity of the main characters financial situation adds a touch of realism to a premise that would otherwise be strictly fantasy. Controlling the main character by limiting his clothing only to the somewhat kinky and fetishy sportsgear is nice. Very hot. The areas that should be improved: While controlling the main character through clothing is interesting and hot, too much time spent counting singlets or worrying about footwear choices detracts from the story. The idea is hot, the actual execution of how the main character thinks about how he will manage it is not very hot and should be shortened. The reader will figure it out without too much insight into the main character's thought-process here. Masturbation! The only sex so far in the story has been masturbation but it barely received a sentence when it happened. Consider trying to flesh out the main characters horny thoughts, desperation, and describing his moments of release. This is an erotic story after all.