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4/11/22, 12:30 AM
Great story. Thank you
Apr 9, 2022
4/10/22, 11:18 PM
That said they did have a couple in the reboot of Stepford Wives but then again that was more turning then into robots rather then mind control. Plus if they're going for an old fashion esstetic then break up a couple and turning one into a house boy isn't a bad idea. They had a 2 bedroom house and wasn't married so easy to do. Sure he seems nice and welcomes them as a married couple and everyone feels they would have accepted them. However that could be an act to. I feel it works either way where they turn them straight and one is a house boy or if you turn them into an old fashion vintage couple.
Apr 9, 2022
4/10/22, 5:22 PM
It was not bad but things seemed to advanced rather quickly. It went they arrive get a welcome gift early evening. Freddy sprays it and suddenly changes. However Mike doesn't notice until the following day and is shocked. He also doesn't feel like he needed brainwashed as he seemed to like the old fashion style and looked the part when requested. However William acts like he's resistant when in fact he's not. It was a commission but feels it could be a little more flushed out.

4/10/22, 5:28 PM
@nerdysuitedbaby Good points and thanks for the feedback. I might revisit the story and flush it out more when I have the time. I'm planning out a preppification series for my SubscribeStar account, I'll make sure it isn't as rushed as this one seems.

4/10/22, 11:13 PM
@Hyp-fet I know can't wait to join. See you soon pal.
Apr 9, 2022
4/10/22, 3:36 AM
I definitely like the whole Stepford vibe of the story; it did remind me of _Them_ on Amazon a bit. I agree with Entraced Gay that Fredrick's turn was a bit abrupt and Michael being made into a houseboy seems out of place with the Stepford, especially as in the Nicole Kidman version of the movie they did have a gay couple and the partner was made into a Stepford spouse.

4/10/22, 4:40 AM
@New Guy in Town Yeah, I know it’s aburpt, this was actually a commission I did for someone and the maximum word count was 3,000 so I didn’t want to go over it by too much.

4/10/22, 11:09 PM
@Hyp-fet Thanks for explaining that; yeah the limit forced your hand. But in general, you did a good job.
4/10/22, 3:29 PM
How did I miss this story? What a fantastic idea. Please tell me that you will continue the story.

4/10/22, 8:14 PM
@Papa Werebear glad you found it and liked it! Yeah, there's more of Mike and Bruno in the Belfort Club series. Though they are minor characters in that one. It's told more from the perspective of a client enjoying the virtual realm they exist in.

4/10/22, 9:02 PM
@MostlySalt Nice thanks for that I will go check thoset stories out!

4/10/22, 10:43 PM
@Papa Werebear went back and re-read it to be sure. And, no those guys are not even mentioned in the stories that follow... Sorry :)
4/10/22, 9:52 PM
Die Story wird spannend... gut geschrieben und da kann noch so allerhand passieren.. freu mich auf weitere folgen.
4/10/22, 9:16 PM
Brilliantly told, each chapter hotter that the last! Casey and Paul's journey is so well done and so hot. Keep it up please!
4/10/22, 9:15 PM
Keeps getting better with each chapter!
4/9/22, 7:22 PM
Another great chapter. But I find it odd that these guys are spending so much time running around campus naked and even cumming in a public display without the cops getting involved. I sure hope no one has sent a copy of the Dare App to the local campus security and Dared them to ignore anything they see that's the result of a dare. That is, when the hot men in uniform of Campus Security aren't getting dared to do things themselves! (hint, hint :))

4/9/22, 8:19 PM
@Evelded hint taken. Tbh, from my time at university, crazy shit happens all the time. But I can see a scenario in my next chapter where campus security get involved.

4/9/22, 11:07 PM
@GoonNoob Honestly, I just love the idea of cops in uniform being forced to strip or otherwise embarrass themselves. Especially the beefy, crew cut cops you're likely to find working for campus police. And it would give you some different body types and age groups to work with besides undergraduate swim team jocks. :)

4/9/22, 11:25 PM
@GoonNoob I can attest to this. We’d have people drunk out of their minds pushing a cardboard box up a hill at 1:00 PM on a Tuesday afternoon. Most everyone just ignored it. :p

4/10/22, 7:57 PM
@Evelded consider your idea accepted and in development.
4/10/22, 2:12 PM
This was a really griping chapter and honestly did not go the way I expected. I think you really nailed the balance between the soft, romantic moments between Will and Ricky with the confronting scences with Leroy. And I also think you handled those scences very well, they were an interesting play on the absolute power corrupting theme while also being just the right amount of uncomfortable for the reader without becoming off putting. As some other comments have pointed out, it was nice to see a more realistic reaction from the victims and for the perpetrator to face some form of consequences. It actually left me with conflicting feelings, I don't know if I hate the Leroy character or if I liked him, hopefully he has a proper redeption arc and more character development through the course of the story. I'm really enjoying Will and Ricky's character growth, learning to overcome their insecurities and their burgeoning self confidence through their new relationship. Also the focus on a specific element of clothing thorough your stories in a creative style choice that I think is really working so far. I look forward to seeing more speedo scenes as this story progresses. I have no idea where the rest of this story could be going but I'm eager to see happens to Will, Ricky and Leroy going forward and what payback they reap upon the football team. I secretly hoping that it might lead to a positive outcome for all involved and perhaps Will and Ricky might find some like minded individuals amongst their ranks that they build a genuine friendship with or that can join their little group. Please keep up the great work, can't wait to see what you come up with next.

4/10/22, 7:56 PM
@phillipsm i think there's tons of conflict between acknowledging that what Leroy did and what W&R did to him, are wrong but at the same time, the fantasy of it is extremely hot. I'm also glad to add speedos and jockstraps to my thong kink theme lol. Where my last story i knew pretty early where the story would end, with some tweaks as the narrative and characters developed, I really have no idea what kind of ending I want to give this one yet. I know what the climatic dare is (unless i decide to keep going) but how I want to end it is still a mystery. Look forward to finding out myself :)