Recent Comments

Anonymous
3/17/22, 12:51 PM
Another hot chapter. You're a very good writer. If I'm being critical, it still feels like Jason and Brock are really similar in personality though, even if they look a little different. I'd love to get the feeling that they've got a genuine dynamic between the two of them. Like, who is the more dominant, or who is the more willing to experiment? Like, other than needing to blend in with the crowd, why did Brock do the snatching and Jason ride the bike? Would also be good to learn what their (former?) life of crime means for their future.

3/17/22, 1:11 PM
thanks @, appreciate the compliments and valid criticism. It's easy, when the characters and their personalities are vivid in the author's mind that not everything gets translated to the page. Will try and work on differentiating between the two, even as they both become anal addicted thong fags. As for their life of crime, ch4 will see them trying to get back into the game but not everything goes as planned.

Anonymous
3/17/22, 2:58 PM
Sounds awesome @GoonNoob Thanks for taking the suggestions so positively - I wouldn't critique if i didnt think you were already a top writer ;)
Anonymous
11/15/21, 3:50 AM
HHHOWWWW do i read all of that and still want more loll I'm sorry, but you're writing is SUPERB! I can't get enough from it...

11/15/21, 4:22 AM
Wow, thanks! More to come! @

Semtex
3/17/22, 2:50 PM
@bluesuedewho it's been a while, when is the next chapter coming out ? this stuff is really good yknow :D.
Mar 31, 2019
3/17/22, 2:04 PM
I think it’s very clever putting the story from the bully’s perspective when he doesn’t comprehend that he’s the bully—yeah, Tailang asked some unreasonable things at first, perhaps, but it becomes quickly clear that the POV is an absolute bitch. I can appreciate his comeuppance without feeling so bad for him.
Anonymous
8/12/17, 9:08 PM
Brb grabbing a flight to Kiev to find the Yellow Room and live there forever.

PromethiumJPM
3/17/22, 12:43 PM
Brother, take me with you!@
3/17/22, 10:40 AM
Love the dramatic changes.
3/16/22, 7:30 PM
Fun first story. I'm looking forward to seeing where you take it.

3/17/22, 10:04 AM
@Derek Williams oh you will get to see where the boys take it ;)
11/10/21, 9:02 PM
Love seeing daddy and son turning other men into gay bears. Hope to see more of them changing others. maybe change a coach into a gay bear?

Anonymous
3/17/22, 8:56 AM
@Redcoma100
Ben
3/10/22, 1:40 AM
I like this story but in this chapter it repeats like 3 times, very confusing

3/17/22, 8:53 AM
@Ben The repeating scenes are a motif of the story, the exact same thing happens in chapter 2. That's how the story works.
Apr 22, 2019
PromethiumJPM
3/17/22, 8:11 AM
Oh My fucking Gourd! A DP so early on, gourds bless this sin! Im all in!