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3/3/22, 1:57 PM
Absolutely awesome story. I really loved the more "real world" and autobiographical style you used here as well as the sense of levity through. It was a nice change to read a story where the person getting hypnotised was a willing participant and to have a happy ending was pleaseantly refreshing. Here's hoping you do decide to add that extra scene at the end and that you might write more stories in this style in the future.

3/7/22, 11:06 PM
> @phillipsm as well as the sense of levity through > Humor is a hard element in erotica. Laugh out loud moments tend to break the mood, so a lot of times I satisfy myself with the "knowing nod" kind of joke. Glad you felt I succeeded.
Jake
3/7/22, 6:01 PM
Excellent installment and absolutely love Robin working his ass for all those in his mind who are admiring it!!
Jake
3/7/22, 5:57 PM
Love it!! The prefect takedown for the perfect hero. Looking forward to all 5 parts!! Especially ove how Robin's mind is slowly coming around/controlled to what his body obviously wants!!
slut
3/7/22, 11:02 AM
so so hot🔥

3/7/22, 5:39 PM
Hell yeah! Glad you enjoyed. I might make a couple more one-shots like this in the future, mostly on the side of sadism/roughness but with a heavy dash of romance. @slut
slut
3/7/22, 11:33 AM
so hot. next time some post orgasm torture pls.🥵

3/7/22, 5:38 PM
I'll have to read up on that! I know basically what to do but have to learn how to write it well, heh. Could be fun to write a one-shot of that ilk, though. (By the way, if you're on a bit of a spree of my stories, check out [Pheromones and the Boys Who Don't Want Them](https://www.gaykinkystories.com/story/show/10003599)! It doesn't have my name on it for now, so you can't see it on my story list, and don't tell anybody I sent you, but after P&FB you might be into this one too.) I'm really glad you enjoyed! This was one of my favourite one-shots to write. @slut
3/7/22, 12:20 AM
I, too, would have liked for this to be stretched out a bit. I responded *very* strongly (sproiiiiing!) to the descriptions of the music's effects, and of the lure of, and satiation of, Elliot's deep need for fatherly love and approval (oh God can I relate). But the actual submission happened too fast for my taste. When Mr. Masters said “That’s it, kid. Give me a little resistance. Make me work for it.”, I expected that to mean more than just the spotting! I also like to see a little more self-awareness of the changes taking place, but I realize that doesn't fit a Himbo theme. Speaking of, why in the world does Elliot think himbos are a myth? I guess he defines the word in the hypno kink context, but most people wouldn't - and there are plenty of real life himbos around, in my gym anyway! I'm usually ***all about*** muscle growth through hard work in a gym, and guys conditioned to be *all in* about it, but in this case it seemed to be a pretty pointless addition. I'm guessing it's more of a holdover from whichever other stories people are referring to in the comments. 😋 And I'm looking forward to reading them, when I find out who wrote this! If I haven't already read them. I know I'm writing a lot more critical things than positive, but I loved this story. Ultimately I think it just suffered from having to be self-contained and short to fit into the challenge framework.

3/7/22, 5:29 PM
@meatheadosis Thanks for the feedback. I agree that the submission could have been longer, but the easy, unaware shift in his thinking didn't match up well with active resistance. I was thinking about making a second chapter, but that's against contest rules, and Elliot's submission seemed like a solid enough ending point. The real issue is that it isn't a standalone story. The line about building muscles and brains is to indicate that Elliot isn't just a plaything, Mr Masters wants to build on what is already there.
3/6/22, 5:44 PM
This is amazingly hot! My favorite part of this series is that Dick doesn't really *do* anything wrong per se. He let the girl choose him lol. It's just pettiness and I'm onboard. I love it! Look forward to the next part.

Kyle Cicero
3/7/22, 1:09 PM
There's a lot to be said for pettiness isn't there. :-)@Some Guy
3/6/22, 9:38 PM
love this, huge fan. you can choose to keep this as chapters of a single story on this site, it makes reading the chapters easier as they are published

Kyle Cicero
3/7/22, 1:09 PM
I'm glad you're enjoying my stories. I am aware of that option but chose not to do it.@eastbay
Anonymous
3/7/22, 10:00 AM
I liked this a lot! Looking forward to more!
Anonymous
3/7/22, 7:16 AM
hot. love it when a cocky jock has a tiny dick. I hope you write more chapters