Recent Comments

3/7/22, 12:20 AM
I, too, would have liked for this to be stretched out a bit. I responded *very* strongly (sproiiiiing!) to the descriptions of the music's effects, and of the lure of, and satiation of, Elliot's deep need for fatherly love and approval (oh God can I relate). But the actual submission happened too fast for my taste. When Mr. Masters said โ€œThatโ€™s it, kid. Give me a little resistance. Make me work for it.โ€, I expected that to mean more than just the spotting! I also like to see a little more self-awareness of the changes taking place, but I realize that doesn't fit a Himbo theme. Speaking of, why in the world does Elliot think himbos are a myth? I guess he defines the word in the hypno kink context, but most people wouldn't - and there are plenty of real life himbos around, in my gym anyway! I'm usually ***all about*** muscle growth through hard work in a gym, and guys conditioned to be *all in* about it, but in this case it seemed to be a pretty pointless addition. I'm guessing it's more of a holdover from whichever other stories people are referring to in the comments. ๐Ÿ˜‹ And I'm looking forward to reading them, when I find out who wrote this! If I haven't already read them. I know I'm writing a lot more critical things than positive, but I loved this story. Ultimately I think it just suffered from having to be self-contained and short to fit into the challenge framework.

3/7/22, 5:29 PM
@meatheadosis Thanks for the feedback. I agree that the submission could have been longer, but the easy, unaware shift in his thinking didn't match up well with active resistance. I was thinking about making a second chapter, but that's against contest rules, and Elliot's submission seemed like a solid enough ending point. The real issue is that it isn't a standalone story. The line about building muscles and brains is to indicate that Elliot isn't just a plaything, Mr Masters wants to build on what is already there.
3/6/22, 5:44 PM
This is amazingly hot! My favorite part of this series is that Dick doesn't really *do* anything wrong per se. He let the girl choose him lol. It's just pettiness and I'm onboard. I love it! Look forward to the next part.

Kyle Cicero
3/7/22, 1:09 PM
There's a lot to be said for pettiness isn't there. :-)@Some Guy
3/6/22, 9:38 PM
love this, huge fan. you can choose to keep this as chapters of a single story on this site, it makes reading the chapters easier as they are published

Kyle Cicero
3/7/22, 1:09 PM
I'm glad you're enjoying my stories. I am aware of that option but chose not to do it.@eastbay
Anonymous
3/7/22, 10:00 AM
I liked this a lot! Looking forward to more!
Anonymous
3/7/22, 7:16 AM
hot. love it when a cocky jock has a tiny dick. I hope you write more chapters
3/7/22, 12:41 AM
Great start. Looking forward to more.
Kods
3/6/22, 9:13 PM
Loving it, but man this emotional roller coaster isn't good for my heart.

3/6/22, 9:17 PM
@Kods Oh dear it only gets worse before it gets better. Brace yourself.
3/6/22, 8:51 PM
So who raises Thomas and Brett's baby?

3/6/22, 9:14 PM
@Cutlerfan Well the question is answered in later chapters and in some detail. Most children of unpaired breeders are auctioned off. This will not be the case for Thomas and Brett's child.
3/6/22, 6:25 PM
Thanks for the update, it just getting better and better. I really like how detailed the change of their bodies and mind in this story

3/6/22, 6:50 PM
@Sufan Glad you are still enjoying the tale. Thanks for the kind words and feedback.
3/6/22, 6:29 PM
Thanks so much ! I have plans for all of them in the next few chapters.