Recent Comments

Jake
3/7/22, 5:57 PM
Love it!! The prefect takedown for the perfect hero. Looking forward to all 5 parts!! Especially ove how Robin's mind is slowly coming around/controlled to what his body obviously wants!!
slut
3/7/22, 11:02 AM
so so hot🔥

3/7/22, 5:39 PM
Hell yeah! Glad you enjoyed. I might make a couple more one-shots like this in the future, mostly on the side of sadism/roughness but with a heavy dash of romance. @slut
slut
3/7/22, 11:33 AM
so hot. next time some post orgasm torture pls.🥵

3/7/22, 5:38 PM
I'll have to read up on that! I know basically what to do but have to learn how to write it well, heh. Could be fun to write a one-shot of that ilk, though. (By the way, if you're on a bit of a spree of my stories, check out [Pheromones and the Boys Who Don't Want Them](https://www.gaykinkystories.com/story/show/10003599)! It doesn't have my name on it for now, so you can't see it on my story list, and don't tell anybody I sent you, but after P&FB you might be into this one too.) I'm really glad you enjoyed! This was one of my favourite one-shots to write. @slut
3/7/22, 12:20 AM
I, too, would have liked for this to be stretched out a bit. I responded *very* strongly (sproiiiiing!) to the descriptions of the music's effects, and of the lure of, and satiation of, Elliot's deep need for fatherly love and approval (oh God can I relate). But the actual submission happened too fast for my taste. When Mr. Masters said “That’s it, kid. Give me a little resistance. Make me work for it.”, I expected that to mean more than just the spotting! I also like to see a little more self-awareness of the changes taking place, but I realize that doesn't fit a Himbo theme. Speaking of, why in the world does Elliot think himbos are a myth? I guess he defines the word in the hypno kink context, but most people wouldn't - and there are plenty of real life himbos around, in my gym anyway! I'm usually ***all about*** muscle growth through hard work in a gym, and guys conditioned to be *all in* about it, but in this case it seemed to be a pretty pointless addition. I'm guessing it's more of a holdover from whichever other stories people are referring to in the comments. 😋 And I'm looking forward to reading them, when I find out who wrote this! If I haven't already read them. I know I'm writing a lot more critical things than positive, but I loved this story. Ultimately I think it just suffered from having to be self-contained and short to fit into the challenge framework.

3/7/22, 5:29 PM
@meatheadosis Thanks for the feedback. I agree that the submission could have been longer, but the easy, unaware shift in his thinking didn't match up well with active resistance. I was thinking about making a second chapter, but that's against contest rules, and Elliot's submission seemed like a solid enough ending point. The real issue is that it isn't a standalone story. The line about building muscles and brains is to indicate that Elliot isn't just a plaything, Mr Masters wants to build on what is already there.
3/6/22, 5:44 PM
This is amazingly hot! My favorite part of this series is that Dick doesn't really *do* anything wrong per se. He let the girl choose him lol. It's just pettiness and I'm onboard. I love it! Look forward to the next part.

Kyle Cicero
3/7/22, 1:09 PM
There's a lot to be said for pettiness isn't there. :-)@Some Guy
3/6/22, 9:38 PM
love this, huge fan. you can choose to keep this as chapters of a single story on this site, it makes reading the chapters easier as they are published

Kyle Cicero
3/7/22, 1:09 PM
I'm glad you're enjoying my stories. I am aware of that option but chose not to do it.@eastbay
Anonymous
3/7/22, 10:00 AM
I liked this a lot! Looking forward to more!
Anonymous
3/7/22, 7:16 AM
hot. love it when a cocky jock has a tiny dick. I hope you write more chapters
3/7/22, 12:41 AM
Great start. Looking forward to more.
Kods
3/6/22, 9:13 PM
Loving it, but man this emotional roller coaster isn't good for my heart.

3/6/22, 9:17 PM
@Kods Oh dear it only gets worse before it gets better. Brace yourself.