Recent Comments

Madoc Larkin
3/4/22, 5:28 PM
I liked it. I appreciate that you didn't take away the protagonist's curiosity or intelligence, just... redirected his ambitions. I also like how the focus stayed squarely on Elliot instead of showing too much about other people in the community... I didn't really care much about whether he got all the answers he wanted from the start.

3/4/22, 9:35 PM
@Madoc Larkin Thank you 😁 I'm glad people are enjoying it.
Mar 21, 2017
3/4/22, 8:25 PM
Would love to see more of this story!
3/4/22, 8:17 PM
big fan of this story. I'll be coming back to it for a re read.
3/4/22, 6:31 PM
I was chatting with a fan over email and they mentioned how much they loved this story. I just binged it – fantastic!
Anonymous
3/4/22, 4:39 PM
Excellent! Can't wait to see this continue! Loving the build up.
3/4/22, 1:02 PM
loved it!!!!
3/4/22, 11:12 AM
Man, i've shot so many loads to this series.
3/4/22, 10:41 AM
Love me a nice happy hypnostory like this.
slut
3/4/22, 10:36 AM
looking forward to part 3. i hope it's going to be a happy story though.
3/4/22, 9:23 AM
I really wanted to like this story, because the basic premise is right up my alley. But I found all the backstory and exposition at the beginning to be incredibly confusing (especially everything about the mysterious benefactor paying for the narrator's law school), and then we never actually got to see what was so "weird" about the gated community. We're told that the men there are himbos, but we're not shown it, and aside from Mr. Masters and the nameless guard, we never get to meet any of the men in the community. Not for me, although I can see how some readers would go crazy for all the "dominant daddy" stuff with Mr. Masters.

3/4/22, 9:58 AM
@Hypnothrill Interesting feedback, but I personally prefer the isolation. Elliot is alone, literally and emotionally, even when he looks in the mirror. The guard has no name for that same reason. Elliot doesn't understand what's going on with Law School, so it didn't make sense narratively to explain it. I don't mean this to sound snarky, I hope it doesn't come across that way.

3/4/22, 10:17 AM
Yeah, that makes total sense. I could see that you were more interested in telling the story about Elliot's internal conflicts and how they get resolved through his ultimate submission. It's just that the story description that got me to click promised a very different story, one that focuses on the gated community and the mystery surrounding it. When I didn't get that story, I was disappointed enough that I felt like leaving a comment.

3/4/22, 10:23 AM
@Hypnothrill Ah, I see your point. Expectation vs Reality is always a struggle.