This is a masterpiece

I'm sorry I'm so late to this. Great story! Well done -- good humor and tone. Really enjoyed it.

I want to be a good boy.

holy hell this entire story chain is perfect. i couldn't help but binge read the whole thing. You're a fantastic writer, sir! I really wish I was in that pack.

To be owned by a loving strong leather daddy... if only... ***sigh***... really nice story... thanks!

I love the doctor's scintillating and sticky plans for his new muscle-boy Marcus! The hot-shot college jock's life looks like it is about to take some unexpected turns. Looking forward to what happens next, starting with that soiled tank top. Hot story!

Magnificent. I think the foreshadowing was always there for this section. There are many ways to weed out the bloodlines. We simply do not know what the all criteria are yet, for certain, although a few fine points have been revealed here!

When I first saw this story I thought I'll brief through it and just leave it. But your story is so genuinely interesting that ended up spending most of today just reading your story, and this is university exams season where time is precious. I just couldn't take my eyes off your story. There were times when I suspected he is going to turn out as a breeder, but as Liam told of his homeland I thought it was going to be a more happy ending story (looking at other comments you say that it will end happily, so I still have my hopes up). I think that the addition of Avon was great world building and emphasized how corrupt the system in Abilon is. I do hope that at the end they will move to Avon with equal rights and may whoever ends up with the pussy will still keep his body and his voice (I admit that the breeder tits are less my type but it's a matter of taste of course). Also I love that Angle is like the voice of reason. He is a true hero and deserves a good ending. TL;DR You did fucking great

**Incredible.** What you are doing here is unprecedented for free writing. You have spent such thought, effort, and energy on this that you should have published it instead perhaps. I have not gone to part 2 yet, looking forward to it in great anticipation, and frankly am enjoying each bodily change the breeders experience, and the Trigger event that causes it, exactly as is. Sucking = Voice change, Ejac = Tits. Love that! I am not sure exactly why this excites me the way it does. Psychology is in there somewhere. Because i am hard core gay i know, but my first and long time sex experiences were all with gen-u-wine female sex organs. Because you Couldnt possibly be attracted to cocks and balls, could you? That made you a cocksucking gay faggot queer (whatever the hell that was, it was obviously horrible perhaps poisonous...) so i started out punting on that infamous river, cosplaying a straight jock BMOC. It was so difficult, you can all probably imagine, but let me mention a couple of things. The smell of pussy made me gag. The more hair, the worse, although the less the better. I had to focus on not vomiting while fucking it, which would certainly have spoiled the moment. And when a she wanted me to eat her out, well that was a performance worthy of a Best Male Drama SAG. I am sorry and embarrased to admit that i used them to get my rocks off. That was pretty much it. That is a terrible inhumane thing. No one was mistreated, we were just flings and toys and fuck puppets, but eventually i couldnt take it anymore. It was too disgusting. Not the guilt. The act. Eventually He, i guess you might say my Bull, saw thru my disguise and made me His happy boy toy thank God. This story plays across me in such odd ways. For someone that doesnt care for 'cunts' the concept of a man having 3 of them, and being hairy and strong and picturing his dick head as a large clit, well why am i leaking as i read and write this then? I am also heavily into chastity caging myself as well, which may play a role, coincidentally having unlocked just yesterday from a 52 day lockdown. Extremely satisfied. That wont last however, and will need to be locked again eventually. Your writing style is clear and dialog is easy to follow almost all the way thru, very few tweaks needed. I think its obvious you built a back story world first and have a branching What If/How decision tree somewhere close by. That is always the base of great story telling. Also I appreciate tales that are not ALL just cocks and cunts and fucking and sucking excluding everything else including romance and tenderness. Right now, my own member is a shadow of its usual self, from its long unused status since early last January. I imagine it would look to you like its on its way to breeder clit state at this moment. Little shruggy sack, short nubby tip. Your story is coaxing it out of its slumber though! Can hardly wait for more!

I'm in literal pain waiting on chapter 10, please give us a treat!! Love this story so much ❤