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2/25/22, 9:35 PM
Great story as always. One minor thing: It feels weird for a straight guy to use the phrase "my heterosexual life partner" about his roommate. it took me out of the story for a moment - which was a shame. I am sure you could have described their sexualities without using such an artificial and technical phrase.

2/25/22, 10:48 PM
Thanks @Lytcom. The phrase is a reference to a Kevin Smith movie and suggests some of the narrator's characterization.

2/26/22, 3:35 PM
Given I’ve seen those movies and remembered the quote, it worked perfectly to paint a picture of the character for me. @Derek Williams

2/26/22, 4:34 PM
Thanks @MonsterMash62! That’s always the tricky part about pop culture references. On one hand, I love that the shorthand works for some folks. On the other hand it pulled Lytcom out for a moment - that’s a tricky balance.
2/26/22, 3:41 PM
very hot love to see how this goes
rwriter51
2/26/22, 7:53 AM
So glad to see this story again. I read it maybe two years ago or so on Nifty, and loved then. I'm looking forward to more updates to our favorite jock pussy.

SC Walker
2/26/22, 3:26 PM
@rwriter51 This is actually a reboot/remake of my old story! I added a lot more and made the characters more complex.
2/26/22, 1:45 PM
That was fuckin HOT, wish it was at least semi real, but then I'd probably wast away and die though 😒
2/26/22, 6:09 AM
Great as

2/26/22, 6:09 AM
@GiveInToTheMusk Great as always! * No matter how many times I tried to edit it in, it won't work

2/26/22, 7:41 AM
Thank ye’ @GiveInToTheMusk!
2/26/22, 5:01 AM
The ball pit was so clever! I always appreciate when authors try a totally unique "game" like that. Great work.

2/26/22, 7:41 AM
Hah, thanks @Jockboy Joe! I was trying to figure out what kind of things he’d run into and the ball pit is my favourite.
Evan
2/26/22, 7:30 AM
This has some great build up, uncertainty in for the main character in what is going on, and slow discovery of the changes he's experienced and their curse as well as how to enjoy them. Looking forward to seeing the continuation. Also send like Sammy had desires he's been trying to keep hidden from his best friend.
2/26/22, 5:21 AM
I'm so glad this story is getting a reboot! "Luke's First Appointment" remains one of my favorites, and I've always wondered what happened next. It will be exciting to see the new twists and turns! Oh, and I have to ask: is the Micucci/My-Coochie pun intentional? :p

SC Walker
2/26/22, 5:25 AM
@Feed Your Head It's going to take a bit to get there, but I WILL continue the story from Luke's First Appointment and show what happens between Luke and Coach Tom. Also, absolutely, I love puns lol
Jack
2/26/22, 4:04 AM
Author, you know that I love your stories. I've left comments about how much I love your stories. I regularly come back to your stories because they make me cum like crazy. So when I say that I really need you to continue this story (and Donkey Cakes), know that it's not because I'm upset. It's because I'm fucking desperate!

SC Walker
2/26/22, 5:24 AM
@Jack I will continue both!! This story already has 4 chapters written. And Donkey Cakes will eventually get finished, I promise!
2/26/22, 12:35 AM
Loved this story, Derek! A bit trippy, but extremely creative and very hot. I liked how the clown kept appearing to guide Smith and exploding into different creatures. All of your stories are very good, but the imagery makes this story one of your best.

2/26/22, 1:59 AM
Thanks @Hypnoguy67! Definitely trippy. Can you believe I was totally sober while I wrote this?

2/26/22, 3:28 AM
@Derek Williams, I have to admit that the thought did cross my mind that maybe you had some "assistance" in creating such a vividly detailed fever dream. Kudos again for your superb writing!