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7/12/25, 1:21 PM
The foot note at the end of this is hilarious. Well done again. Great middle chapter and perfect set up for what comes in the final chapter.
7/12/25, 1:04 PM
Wow. I only saw the third and final part of this yesterday and loved it. This is a nice surprise. Great set up. Very hot and very clever and very well done. This story has all the ingredients to be perfectly baked. A big dick and big muscular guy getting a bigger dick and more muscular and all of his football buddies coming along is hot as hell. The changes to the narrator are also hot as hell. And the narrator being somewhat aware that things can happen but still being clueless is chef’s kiss. And of course, all of that isn’t enough. This story is also a clever critique about our perspectives on camp, and done in a way that can be skipped if you don’t want to read the footnotes. Which is super meta and funny as hell while being insightful. I’m pretty sure who this author is and think they’ve managed to redux a mechanism they did on a previous story where we see parts of the same scene repeated in slight variations, each one hotter than the last. Also incredibly well done.
7/12/25, 12:10 PM
Sorry man, this was it! I wanted to leave the rest to the viewer's imagination.
7/12/25, 10:49 AM
Thanks, Bro!
Anonymous
7/12/25, 9:15 AM
Incredibly hot story. Can’t wait for next chapter and to see how much he’s gonna shrink!
7/12/25, 9:10 AM
Were there ever any more chapters to this story???
7/12/25, 5:25 AM
Here's a question to speculate on: What state will Jamie be in on the morning after? Will he still be in full or almost full slave mode? Will he have reverted completely to his angry, unhappy,, and stroppy self? Will he be somewhere in between? Please discuss. I'd love to see what everyone thinks on this.
birdbrained
7/12/25, 1:09 AM
just binged this overnight after seeing it update on ao3, and then realizing that if it's crossposted there there might be updates somewhere else. incredible story - hot as hell, and it's the worldbuilding and the plot that really sell the sexiness of it. frankly, this story is going to live rent-free in my head for the six months, if not longer. had a few thoughts/questions - would love to hear from others if i missed anything or if i'm completely insane. - onyx is definitely related to valour somehow, right? in chapter 9, kane's point-of-view has the // that previously indicated onyx's power was being used to redirect when he started thinking about valour having family in florida, and there's a few references across the story to onyx having learned behavior from valour or acting like him. they're pretty similar in the moral bankruptcy department, honestly, except onyx is way more likeable. smarmy bastard. definitely my favorite character, as great as the others are. - chapter 6 mentions a number of other drone types. we know most of them, but were DC and DG ever explained? i assume DC is some kind of 'controller' based on context, but i don't remember seeing the DG designation ever again. - i went through all of our named/numbered heroes and villains, and it looks like all of the numbers are accounted for except for 006 (which, based on timeline, should be minotaur) and all of the missing heroes/villains are accounted for except for the 'a hero who wasn't one any more' in chapter 2 (which, based on context, is probably onyx?). very cool seeing how much of this was plotted out from the start! super excited for the next update, whenever that will be. thanks for writing and sharing!

7/12/25, 5:17 AM
@birdbrained Onyx - Valour - I guess it's possible, but those are pretty tenuous hints. We know that at least some of what Onyx told Kane about his past wasn't true, and it's probably a lot. Given that he's a Trans man who transitioned after he came to the UK, he was clearly no frat boy. On the other hand, he did briefly work at the League. Maybe that came about because he had a cousin in high places. Still, any connection is very tenuous. On the drone types, good observation and attention to detail there. And no, neither DCs or DGs have been mentioned again, and we don't know what they are. And if you matched the number of drone types mentioned to the number of doors, you'll find that there's one type that's still completely unknown. DS-006 is indeed Minotaur. I think the "hero who wasn't one anymore" is a reference to Midnight, not Onyx. For one thing, at that point, Onyx hasn't even entered the story, and while he does seem to have been part of the League in some capacity, it's not clear he was actually a hero. And even if he had been, Jamie has no idea what happened to him. Meanwhile, he just found out last night what happened to Midnight after he disappeared 3 years ago, specifically that he had become a supervillain's minion, possibly voluntarily. He is a "hero who wasn't one anymore."
7/11/25, 5:27 AM
Wow! The horniest scene yet. Great writing here, @NeonDemon. There's a lot to unpack and speculate about. First, if there was any expectation that Master was going to allow Jamie a truly free choice, you can forget about that. Master's M.O. is always to tilt the playing field in his favor, and he does it Masterfully here. Then there's the revelation about the origins of powers. Using dark matter and dark energy as the moving forces was a stroke of genius. It's NeonDemon's hyperdive. Another good one is the "half awakening." That presents a lot of options for Jamie's future. And that unseen second crack in Jamie's power dam? Where will that lead us? I suspect Mentat put it there, knowing the League is going to lose Jamie to Master, why not make him a time bomb that could seriously damage Myriad’s Network? It's not as if the League leadership cares if innocents get killed or injured when he goes off. To the contrary, it fits ever so nicely into their manipulations to keep the populace fearful and dependent on the League. But only NeonDemon knows for sure where it came from. Maybe he'll tell us before he's done. Anyway, this is a terrific job of leaving us in suspense and wanting more. You hear me, NeonDemon? I want more!

Anonymous
7/11/25, 9:12 PM
@[copsboy64](/user/show/910425) 100%, there's no way that Mentat was unaware that Jamie's heroism was slowly corroded away. I mean, if I were Mentat, I'd do the same

7/12/25, 4:06 AM
@Anonymous My theory is that on his recent check up visit, Mentat clocked how thoroughly Master was embedding himself in Jamie's mind, and that he was pretty much a lost cause. So he created a time bomb with the mental power limiting dam by adding the new crack. It at least has the potential to strike a powerful blow against Myriad and his Network.
7/12/25, 1:20 AM
Excellent story, I hope you will someday publish your other stories on this site and they will be freely available) especially the story about Revenge and Secrets.