Recent Comments

Anonymous
2/12/22, 11:55 AM
Wow, I'm *so* not proud of Mark because Mark isn't a real person but a fictional character. Equally true, this was a tease, tease, tease story that never built up or lived up. [As Marcia points out, in 17 chapters, you have one chapter where Mark and Steve has sex as sub and dom](https://sickofitradlz.blogspot.com/2022/02/dog-days-are-beginning-is-awful-online.html). One chapter. Tease, tease, tease. She's also right that Steve needs to have some conflict and not be so damn passive for this to have any real drama. There is none. It's a bad first draft that another writer needs to grab and rework because the roots were there but it was not pulled off. This is the sort of bland Gary Marshall Exit to Eden bull where you pretend you're going to explore dom and sub but then cop out because you're too damn cowardly and instead want to tease. The immaturity level of this piece is shocking. the author was offered good criticism throughout the posting of chapters (which went up first at Nifty) but ignored the suggestions -- whether a dom or a sub was explaining it to him, the author ignored it. His story would have greatly benefited from him utilzing feedback. As it stands, this is a cock tease story that never lives up to its promise and treats the dom and sub experience as something to sneer at and escape from. Mark and Steve are suburban Karens trying to be 'hip' but in the end just want it vanila. Take that nosnene to a site that doesn't explore s&m themes. What a cowardly story and, considering the audience here, what an insulting one. I'm a dom and proud of it. My sub and I don't need to run from who we are or work through our 'kinks' to be 'normal.' This story basically is as insulting as gay conversion therapy.

Martin
2/12/22, 4:01 PM
Whatever your issues are with the story and the author, please keep it civil. Much of your text seem to be targetted at offending the author (the so called review you've linked to is even worse making me think you're the same person). But a genuine critique should never ever target and offend the author. I don't want to comment on whether your gripes are justified or not, everyone is entitled to their own opinion. But please remember that this story has been offered for free. You knew the story before, so you just came here to vent your anger to another outlet. This is saying more about yourself than what you claim to know about the author of the story.
2/12/22, 3:59 PM
That was fun! I do prefer less happy endings for protagonists, but this was up my alley. Good job!
2/12/22, 3:56 PM
this is a really cool story, I hope you end up doing more chapters of it!
2/12/22, 3:16 PM
Well, I seem to have a new favorite author on this site : )
2/12/22, 2:08 PM
Incredibly hot and well written. It has to continue ...
Evan
2/10/22, 6:05 AM
Cool story theme. Curious where it's heading. Look forward to more.

2/12/22, 1:57 PM
thanks!@Evan
2/12/22, 1:23 PM
very hot! nice job!
2/12/22, 1:08 PM
One of my all time favorites of yours!
2/12/22, 5:27 AM
I wish chris understood his role as a drone instead of an independent person in the end! but I've been finding these drone stories really get me going lately, thanks for adding to the mix.

2/12/22, 11:28 AM
@BlondieBoy Thanks for reading! I'm really glad you like it.
2/11/22, 4:57 PM
Thanks Absman. I pre-ordered my copy. Looking forward to the hard ons it will inspire.

2/11/22, 10:36 PM
@TexMuscle I'm dying to know what people think of it. So far, only three aside from me have read it: my INCREDIBLE editor @paradoxbear who's comments littered my manuscript (153! I'll sing a love song to him in a couple of days); A friend who edits gov't manuals -- a lawyer -- who enjoyed it but worried that the "average" reader might think there's too many subplots; A dear friend who's a composer/ lawyer (by day) who loved PHOLUS REBORN enough to sell a bunch of copies for me -- said, "This book makes you a real writer." (I don't know what that meant, but I accepted it.) Please read it quick and let me know!

2/12/22, 2:38 AM
@absman420 you know I love all your sub plots. Your green thumb has pressed my button over the years offering up a sticky thank you. I'd even start drinking milk again if I could pick the source. Are you thinking about a third book? I still want to see your take on my thought of a "Quantum Leap / Orgasm" story. Propelling the reader into a character of a favorite story. Maybe they don't gain full control of the body until he reaches an orgasm then can bend the story. Classics or standards never go out of style. You have inspired many. Some maybe one hit wonders but we want you to keep hitting it.

2/12/22, 11:28 AM
> @TexMuscle Are you thinking about a third book? > Yes, I'm already outlining the plot. I CAN tell you the title: TRANSFIGURATION