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2/2/22, 12:10 PM
awesome story. loved it.
2/2/22, 6:39 AM
Dun-dun-DUN!!!! Loved this part! Super intrigued.

2/2/22, 11:30 AM
@stimle lol thanks man!
2/1/22, 9:30 PM
:D Welcome back

2/2/22, 9:16 AM
Thanks @rayn, sorry for the wait
2/2/22, 8:11 AM
Great story, for me one more chapter where he goes back to patient 109 and says something on the lines of "it feels so good bro, trying to keep it under raps until we can infect the rest of the facility with our goonsticks
2/2/22, 8:07 AM
Oh, surely you're going to continue with this, pleeeease?
SlutForHypno
2/2/22, 3:33 AM
Woot Woot! The big bad has been taken down Hooray! You might be surprised to find he's not quite what you expected. All will be revealed next chapter, but I made him out to be a victim of the masters similar to everyone else. This chapter was very melodramatic, but it was a the penultimate chapter and I found it kinda neat to tie everything together. Next chapter won't be coming out for at least a week unfortunately seeing as I just wont have time to write in the near future. But I am very excited for it and it will have have plenty of Sex haha. Some of you may have already figured out some of the twists since I'm not very subtle and a lot of it is going in very obvious places haha. But I have enjoyed writing the series all the same. It made me realize I want to write more. Next Chapter: The Finale. Luke Makes a fated decision.
Anonymous
2/2/22, 3:10 AM
The story has a very strong romantic element for sure. The love between Shelby and Dickon feels forbidden, and theres certainly a feeling of hope when you get to the ending. i admit the style took a second to get used to. But there is great care taken to write a very technically sound story. Writing is far and away the most important category for me, and you did an excellent job on that front.

2/2/22, 3:25 AM
Thanks! This one went through a lot of revision before I hit publish. Glad you enjoyed :)
Anonymous
2/2/22, 2:48 AM
So hot!! I'm loving it!!!!
2/2/22, 1:15 AM
loved it!
Evan
2/1/22, 10:57 PM
A fun concept and a sneaky way to get the change started with the pillowcase. I'd recommend some formatting to make your story friendlier to the reader. A large paragraph to start can be daunting. Also, look at the structure of dialogue in narrative writing. Whenever you switch speakers, make a new paragraph. The same block of text should not have two people saying words. This makes it clear the speaker has changed so the reader can follow. It also helps pacing slightly with not everything feeling like it's happening at once. A good resource: https://www.ursinus.edu/live/files/1158-formatting-dialogue Mainly the "Changing Paragraphs" section. But it is all helpful. Keep writing! I look forward to your next chapter.