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Evan
1/26/22, 1:16 PM
I enjoy the idea behind this and I'm curious where you'll take out, what sort of challenges and temptations and traps await. If I may offer some advice, you have a lot of action being explained to us rather than feeling it through the eyes of the characters. The guys are all a bit interchangeable right now too, they haven't had a chance to become people before Asmodeus pounced on them. Tanner is obviously a selfish asshole so that's staying to differentiate him from the rest. Thanks for sharing your story! looking forward to more.

1/26/22, 3:51 PM
@Evan i totally agree with your character building comment, and i tried to be mindful of it. i purposefully was trying to keep the reader with only the same information the boys have, which right now their information only being purely surface level. they just woke up in this place, i wanted to throw them into the thick of it to set the tone of the story going forward. i want the boys (and readers) to slowly learn more about each other through out the journey. its going to be a slow burn, they need to break down eachothers walls, learn to trust each other with their deepest darkest secrets, and chose either to work with or against each other. i loved hearing your perspective though, its hard to try to understand the story from a readers perspective when you know the whole unwritten plot lol please keep commenting it helps a lot
Blakenikolas
1/26/22, 3:31 PM
glad it didn't gowhere i thought it was gonna
1/24/22, 11:11 PM
How is the device changing him? i could fatten him up

1/26/22, 3:27 PM
@Iorek in a very simple way is hormones restructuring fatty tissue at an accelerated timeline, obviously, fiction. The human body can't function without hormones because they promote everything in every organ, if you could change the direction, speed and design of said hormones, theoretically speaking, you could edit the human body in certain ways, as in, breast augmentation, etc.
1/26/22, 1:42 PM
Fucking amazing. The detailed descriptions are so damn hot.
Tmp1142
1/26/22, 1:15 PM
Hope we get more of this story some day!
1/26/22, 12:58 PM
I'm loving this, Cant wait for a scene at his school and how everyone will react, and how he will use his old bully
1/26/22, 12:40 PM
Oh my god.. So good to have you back on this story. It was perfection
1/26/22, 11:10 AM
What a great story. I especially like the fact that we don't really know what Jesse was like before the Priapist started messaging him. It is clear that he is already familiar with the username at the start of the story so he must have already written something before. Is Jesse's thoughts of working out and feeling sexy just another of the Priapist's manipulations? I also really like the small hint that Jesse might actually have been straight before meeting the Priapist.

1/26/22, 12:38 PM
I’m glad you enjoyed it! Yeah, I deliberately left a fair amount of this story up to reader interpretation. It’s part of a series of these stories that’s going to gradually develop the reality change mechanic, so feel free to speculate, and if I’m clever enough about it, what’s actually going on will slowly be revealed… I will note that I think I meant to imply in the story that the Priapist is the one who most vocally wanted Jesse to show off his biceps. That’s as far back as the Priapist’s influence, magical or not, goes on Jesse. What he actually did, also up to reader interpretation, haha. @Lytcom
1/25/22, 10:36 PM
Oh, yes, yesss! Excellent! it was great, and I'm wishing to see what's next for the idol with all of those changes! It's going deliciously, I'll be anxiously waiting for the next chapter!!!

1/26/22, 9:29 AM
thank you for enjoying my story more to come @Plymouth58
1/26/22, 9:23 AM
A LOAD BLOWINGLY WONDERFUL TALE! 🍆💦💦