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Kristoff_ColBry
1/19/22, 10:45 PM
can't wait for the next chapter.
mic
1/19/22, 10:30 PM
one of the best storys ever, please write more, fucking hot tricked, more bros, more tricking , humilation chasity filming blackmail etc , wow so hot your story
1/19/22, 4:51 AM
I love the premise of this story. There are some really good concepts here. I'd be having a tough time resisting if I were Luke!

hypnoslut
1/19/22, 8:23 PM
@Jockboy Joe Glad you like the concepts. Hopefully you like the execution just as much down the line haha. And yea, I'd have a hard time resisting as well. Luke is too stubborn and defiant for his own good...He's a total brat. But hey, the harder the struggle, the sweeter the downfall.
1/18/22, 8:53 PM
I generally like the idea of this series, so much so I'm inclined to write stories involving it. But I'm inclined to take the university setting a bit more seriously and tone down the sex aspect. Rather than post them in your series (and perhaps break up the flow of your work) I'll post them as my own works. When I do I'd love to have your feedback on them.

hypnoslut
1/18/22, 10:36 PM
@New Guy in Town Go for it. This is literally my first ever writing project so I'm by no means an expert but I'd gladly tell you what I think. I didn't write this to be some IP either so it would be rather cool if it spawned new ideas. If you are wondering what my thought process behind the idea of this series... aside from corrupting a bunch of cute boys into being the sluts they were always meant to be... My rational behind the story was to experiment with the idea of what hypnosis can really do and its potential benefits to help people, with all the tropes I love of hypnosis stories. .... I'm also a huge nerd who's insane and goes all in on an idea so of course I turned hypnosis into a power system like its a shonen anime lol

1/19/22, 3:42 AM
@hypnoslut I recognized the ranking system immediately when I saw it. But even with that I could also see the schooling side of things being a bit more part of the story a la *Naruto* and *Boruto* .

hypnoslut
1/19/22, 8:21 PM
@New Guy in Town Yea go for it dude. You could totally get creative with the premise. I can see the idea of a gay hypno school being used in several creative and erotic ways.
Evan
1/19/22, 9:42 AM
I've really enjoyed this series and there was a nice payoff on earlier chapters in this one. Thank you, I love it. I was so eager and hoping Luke would get to feel what happens over the edge of the cliff. You've already gotten feedback on spelling and formatting but I have to say well done. The structure of a story and keeping me interested is really great! I'm interested and want to keep reading. Since you said in another comment that you don't know how that dialogue format works. Here's a quick example. When someone talks, make it a paragraph of its own: > "Hi," Luke said, chasing the kite. > > "I'm James," the other boy said, making the kite dive. > > "Nice to meet you," Luke said, panting and out of breath. "Do you come here often?" It makes it very clear when a new person is speaking. You can still add description and narrative with it if you want, but any time a different person speaks then press enter twice first and make it a new paragraph as an indicator that it's no longer the same person speaking. This makes it very easy for the reader to follow the conversation. And with that convention, you don't necessarily have to put everyone's name in all the time either. Now that we know we're up to Luke in the example, if there's a new paragraph below that with some dialogue, it's pretty safe to assume it's James again because if it was someone new (or Luke again for some reason) you would just say so. Spelling is a bit harder if the words sound the same and are spelled differently butt are still both words because spellchecker won't pick it up. But grammar checkers and context editors like Google Docs (for free if you don't mind using Google stuff) can sometimes highlight that sort of thing. But I can't promise the formatting there will come across when you paste it into the stories site.

Martin
1/19/22, 9:56 AM
@Evan 👍

SlutForHypno
1/19/22, 8:19 PM
@Evan Thank you so much for the advice. Honestly that might make things easier format wise. I promise I'll try to clear up on the spelling and grammar as well. I'm not the most careful of writers, nor the best for that matter. Especially this is purely for fun. but I'll try to give it an extra read through before publishing lol. I'm glad you're liking it so far. I can promise you Luke has not even begun what it truly means for him to fall of the cliff. He may just cum to love his decent into oblivion.
1/19/22, 8:11 PM
Honestly I thought this chapter was great. I wouldn't mind if it was longer. Does Cub University take transfer students?
1/19/22, 6:55 PM
looking forward to whatever happens next!
Fan
1/19/22, 6:17 PM
Wow! That's just super hot! "To be continued" not "the End" pleaseeee?
Anonymous
1/19/22, 2:56 PM
Do you have tumblr or Patreon?

Jonathan
1/19/22, 6:14 PM
@ Anonymous . Glad you liked it! And yes, this is the end but who knows, maybe Jonathan falls under the control of his barber.

Jonathan
1/19/22, 6:15 PM
sorry, I don't have either
1/19/22, 5:53 PM
@bluesuedewho, hope you're doing okay!