Recent Comments

EntrancedGay92
1/18/22, 11:32 AM
I enjoyed this story. It was short, sweet, and to the point! I can never resist (pun intended) a husband who is hypnotized to hypnotize his partner. Looking forward to the chapter, if there is one.

1/19/22, 1:46 AM
@EntrancedGay92 There is a new chapter that should be approved for publishing very soon.
1/18/22, 10:08 PM
Ahmed's fall is probably a bit too abrupt and easy. I was kinda expecting that there would be some kind of restraining---after all, by then, Osamu had control over everybody else in the room, and could easily have him pinned. Ahmed's recklessness, to confront without any backup, not even telling his hypno friends, or even his tists, is a bit weird, given that Cody already warned him.

1/19/22, 1:26 AM
@naturallyInconsistent If I'd actually gone through the story "normally" (meaning going through proofreaders as well as me re-reading it one or two more times), I probably would've tightened that up a bit to make it more plausible. My thinking was that Ahmed basically wanted to go under, and was therefore careless. Having seen it now on H4G a little, I know that some people don't put up much of a fight, especially if they've been under multiple times. Osamu recognized what was going on very early—most hypnotists would recognize the signs of someone fighting off trance—and he was just toying with Ahmed once he realized what was really happening. Osamu's tone and...errr...threatening-seductiveness(?) were already playing into Ahmed's fantasies, so he didn't need much of a push to take him over the edge.
1/19/22, 12:26 AM
Different & a fun read.
1/19/22, 12:17 AM
Nice job with some difficult tags! I think you chose the correct ending. Much as I love muscle growth stories, I couldn't help but find myself hoping that the narrator would eventually be wise enough to wish for his dysmorphia to go away, since that is the true source of his problems. But how to play that for laughs? You really cannot. I think you found your way to the best ending for this story without ruining the light tone.
1/18/22, 11:43 PM
Very, very hot. Would love to read more. How do I apply to Hypno University?

hypnoslut
1/19/22, 12:14 AM
@Beaner Thank you very much. IDK how many more chapters it will be, but I intend to at least finish Luke's story. The boi still has a long way to go. And sadly, you can't apply to Cub University. The students are selected. And whether or not they want to, or are even are aware of it...they attend forever
Sexcrab
1/18/22, 11:33 PM
Simple and captivating, a great series.
Anonymous
1/18/22, 11:32 PM
This story is awesome really interested in how it all turns out. More bunnies would of course be better :) Hope there is a next part.
1/18/22, 11:23 PM
Oh but I do love medical scenes ever so.
Martin
1/18/22, 10:08 PM
This is really becoming very intense and much better than I expected. Respect! You have to work a bit on your spelling ("seen" instead of "scene" for example) and especially you should format your stories a bit better (use WAY more paragraph breaks, especially when using direct speech). But this is really good for your first attempt. What exactly is stigking? I didn't even know that we're in a partnership now. Not that I mind, but I would have liked to be told first... :)

hypnoslut
1/18/22, 10:30 PM
@Martin Thanks I appreciate the input. This is literally my first ever writing project I decided to do the night before when I was bored and couldn't sleep haha. I also appreciate the input. I've never really done this before and am not really sure where to break up paragraphs. Though I can totally see you're point. Its kinda why I opened it up to editing. As for the Stigking...sorry about that lol. Both that and a lot of my spelling with this recent story was it was 2 in the morning and had to work the next day so I wanted to get it done before I went to bed. I'm glad you like it though and am willing to listen to input both in terms of basic editing crap and story structure haha.