Recent Comments

1/11/22, 9:07 PM
I liked the pacing and dialogue in this story. Snappy and to the point is very much a style I enjoy as well as having some elements of stream of consciousness of the POV character. I think there were many clever little decisions made regarding word choice and what parts of the stream of consciousness were revealed to us the readers to characterise the POV character. I did think the reveal of the curse and where it came from felt a little jarring but it is very understandable given your disclaimer as well as your goal with this piece to flesh out a concept. Highlights were definitely how much you managed to make this character feel real whike being inside their head the whole way. Interesting piece, all in all.
1/11/22, 6:29 PM
you should continue this
KKA
1/11/22, 3:37 PM
How sweet, Yes, Gregor deserves an ending like this. Thank you for sharing!

1/11/22, 4:54 PM
@KKA Thank you for reading!
1/11/22, 4:42 PM
Don't get me wrong, I really like this series, but I'm not sure if this chapter added much to it. The emphasis is more on the hot accounting action than hot sex or mind control scenes.
Anonymous
1/11/22, 4:19 PM
delicious!!!
7B7
1/11/22, 3:28 PM
yeaaaah no
1/11/22, 7:51 AM
This chapter and the chapter where Eli gets taken... dang!!

1/11/22, 2:00 PM
@stimle thanks bud!

Martin
1/11/22, 3:08 PM
@stimle Yeah that's my favorite chapter, too. Eli's conversion is the hottest.
1/11/22, 2:54 PM
I love this story! can't wait for the next one.
1/11/22, 7:54 AM
I have to say, I suspected this outcome early on based on a few clues you dropped, but the way executed it was just spectacular. Just fantastic stuff, Jack.

1/11/22, 1:59 PM
@stimle kind words from you sir
1/11/22, 12:11 PM
A bit of a slapstick type of mind control. It wasn't clear to me what the identity of the first POV person was, which made me a bit confused until the swap in POV.