Recent Comments

Thomas97
1/6/22, 7:07 AM
it's a good start, although I would have preferred to get more information of this facility. so you could have started way before boy is captured and he could remember his escape from this institute, his background etc. then you could describe his capture and finally add your part here. nevertheless I like your writing. bondage is described well. maybe this dialogue between driver and officer is way to long for me and don't proceed story well. I would like to get more insight from victims point of view I'm looking forward to part 2:)

1/6/22, 9:00 AM
Thank you for the suggestions, I have provided some basic information about the facility. I believe this will solve some unnecessary confusion that readers have. Meanwhile, I realize there are format problems in dialogue that make it unpleasant to read. I tried to separate the dialogue to make it looks cleaner. I'm working on this series and I hope the next chapter will be better and legitimate officer's behavior in this chapter. @Thomas97

naturallyInconsistent
1/10/22, 11:13 PM
@darkfantasy The story is a bit short and ended abruptly. Looking forward to more. You could do a lot with this. You could enslave the nosy guy. You could have a officer's backstory. You could have the escapee's backstory. You could branch it many ways out. Excite us!
1/10/22, 10:55 PM
I loved every second reading this. It must have taken a fair few hours. Well crafted and a tale which kept me coming back for more. Thanks for working hard to bring us such a well written, different story
1/10/22, 10:38 PM
Getting the cock of a pornstar is an interesting concept, but I would have preferred the transformation to stop there. It could have played out in the text in such a way that you wouldn't be quite sure if the cock had transformed or not until the end when he ejaculates through what was once just rubber.
1/10/22, 6:20 PM
This was a fascinating premise! I found myself wishing for a longer, hornier and more degrading sex scene between them - which is very much new for me! Well done, dude!

1/10/22, 10:23 PM
@Dace I agree with you 100% -- I let him off too easy in the sex scene. I'm just not into humiliation myself, so I never know where that line is.
1/5/22, 8:46 PM
The buildup throughout the story, first slowly revealing something is off ("They saw to that"), and then handing out clues about what that might be, makes a great parallel story that unfolds behind the main story. The wording threw me off and made me think of some group like a science experiment, the military, or an agency. I felt he perhaps swung from reserved to exposing himself a bit abruptly. He could easily have reasoned something like "I'm not gonna see these fuckers again, so I don't care." The post-transformation exposé is perhaps a bit overly detailed for something in that moment. I also would have loved the "Not anymore" to be cut and be implied. This is probably just a fixation of mine, but since almost nothing fits anymore and Tanner has seen this already several times, he could toss Richard some immediate tips. "With such a body no one is going to stop you entering a sports goods store. Take flip flops, cut the sides off a T-shirt, and wear your basket shorts as hot pants." Overall a well crafted story on a good premise that I enjoyed.

1/10/22, 10:22 PM
@Josh Slater Thanks very much! I haven't read this story in a good long time. It was one of those "I've got a concept that I'm gonna flesh out" things for me. I'm glad it works for you.
Anonymous
1/10/22, 9:37 PM
Really like where this story is going! Great chapter!
1/10/22, 8:35 PM
I would also love to see a follow up to where they are afterwards!
screamingmoist
1/10/22, 7:37 PM
Thanks for the feedback everyone! I fully intended to go the traditional route with the boss being changed, but once I started writing it felt better to go in the direction that it did.
Anonymous
1/10/22, 7:16 PM
Hot and sexy -- I want to be one of those boys
1/10/22, 5:39 PM
very sexy