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12/24/21, 11:46 AM
it's always so exciting to see another chapter of any of your stories. this was amazing! i really wish this level of mind control can be a real thing 😏 Hopefully they had some natural nighttime erections in the mouths of the others. I love those moments when they are aware of the state they're in but can't do anything about it or when the father/son are forced to see each other in a way they are not used to. I could just hear all the sounds in that room 🥰 I love that the boss is this ominous character. Personally knowing more about him or his purpose is not as exciting as watching his work which I hope continues on with more depravity. Fingers crossed for ass eating and piss drinking 🥺

12/24/21, 7:51 PM
@HusbandFirst Thanks for your support! ;) Thankfully, for the servants at least, they are getting some real peace during their sleep, so nothing was to happen during the night and they can just sleep naturally. It's in the Club's best interests to have well-rested, energized servants to keep their members entertained and satisfied! My idea of the Boss character is similar to your thoughts too. We all know there is this ultimate "mastermind" who is running the Club and using these strong mind control measures to keep a stable of slaves. But in the context of my storytelling, the Boss is not important. My main focus is not on the Boss or his powers of control, rather it is mainly on the unfortunate experiences of the Servants subjected to this control and how their lives become out of control having to live through all this debauchery. As you may realize, there are many functions and services offered in such a large Gentlemen's Club...so stay tuned for all of them to be explored as the characters continue to go through their duties (including your suggestions....maybe? ;p).
Ben
12/24/21, 7:04 AM
Loved this!! Hit alot of my buttons!!! 🔥

12/24/21, 7:49 PM
@Ben Thanks! This was my first story.
Martin
12/24/21, 6:15 PM
This was disturbingly hot, damn it!
Dec 24, 2021
12/24/21, 6:14 PM
Is this your first story? Nice work. You laid out the details of this kind of total power exchange relationship well. Nothing surprising here, but this is the classic total power exchange master/slave fantasy in a nutshell. I think it would help if you delved into the mindset of your submissive character more deeply, helped the reader understand why a young man in such a position (3rd year lawyer?) would want to add such a relationship on top of that, and what he's getting out of it aside from the abuse. It would also be interesting to see more of the master's mindset, but I understand these fantasies are usually written from the submissive perspective, and it's pretty normal for the master characters to come across like sphinxes.
Martin
12/24/21, 5:51 PM
What a wonderful story, Cockatrice! It's so beautiful, exactly what I had in mind with Cupid, and yet it feels so out of place, like it doesn't belong to this place full of smut (not meant in any bad way) but to a place of beauty and philosophy. I'm very honored that you've published it here. I think it's the first time that I shed some small tears over a story here. Yes, I cry easily all the time, but still... I can only hope that you'll find your own nature spirit yourself and that you'll take his good advice to your heart. You deserve it. Happy Christmas! And thank you for those beautiful moments I had reading this story!
12/24/21, 1:14 PM
this is hot, as it always is with these two, but what's up with that chastity couple?

12/24/21, 5:26 PM
@Zi19 thank you so much!! i was editing this for so long bc i couldn't decide if i should take out those side-stories since they aren't fleshed out here. the couple who got huge cocks and the couple in chastity are/were little side TFs that I've sketched out but unsure if it'll make it into a published story. to "spoil" the chastity couple's story a bit -- one of them is a top, and this is his first time in a cage. he's trying it out to see what it's like for his boyfriend, who is locked pretty much constantly. his bf is a dedicated bottom and hates using his dick, and he's the one that approached razz and asked nicely for some magic. turns out he's dysmorphic about having a package, and would prefer to be nullo. razz uses derek's milk to make those dreams a reality. there are more details i have in mind, so hopefully i'll get around to writing a follow up for some of these loose threads
12/24/21, 1:50 PM
What can I say Derek? All of the guys above have already done that. It's been amazing to see the writers journey you've been on over the years with your stories, ideas and how you develop your characters. One of your experimental stories actually gave me the idea I am using for my Masters in Creative writing. Please continue, you are an inspiration for some of us. Your playing with various genres is always great to see too. Also, you have a talent for managing a viewers expectations and then surpassing them Now the compliment is done. That was also a damn hot story. Thanks. TC

12/24/21, 4:47 PM
Whoa @Tattcub! You can’t just drop that about your Masters and not tell me more! Which story? What’s the idea?
Henry Cavanaugh
12/24/21, 4:40 PM
Thank you for writing me a story as part of the exchange! Have a good Christmas.
12/24/21, 4:22 PM
Loved these snippets! I'm always a fan of a cow-man, but damn that cum dump change was hot too
12/24/21, 3:19 PM
To me, this was your most approachable story. The themes are universal, like any good fable, and it doesn't have the layer of oddness that you normally have in your transformation stories that I feel like I need to penetrate in order to appreciate the story (so all I'm saying here is that this story requires less effort on the part of the reader to appreciate, I don't think that's necessarily a good or a bad thing). I like how you structured this story, time wise. The parts of it that are very personal to you resonated most strongly. I didn't think the story was sad overall, more like bittersweet. I understand why you ended the story how you did, and didn't put Vesa and Nash together even though you obviously could have gone that route. It just wasn't the point you were making, so that's not sad to me. Definitely reminds me of Spider's approach to storytelling, and I'm happy to see you branch out and try a different mode of storytelling from your usual. Hope you have a great Christmas, bro.

12/24/21, 3:54 PM
@amul Thank you for your comment. I agree with you that I think of it more as a bittersweet story, but people's mileage may vary, so I decided to keep the "disclaimer". You are also correct in your observation that getting Nash and Vesa together at the end would have been anathema to their overall character arcs. Nash and Vesa were supposed to grow emotionally from their experience with Florian, not have it handed to them on a silver platter. Have a nice christmas as well. :)