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12/9/21, 11:12 AM
For some reason I was expecting the gym guy to have given him the hyno video. So what does our main character look like other than having a small cock? Did his cock actually shrink? So many questions, I can't wait until the next part.
12/9/21, 11:03 AM
Yes! Excellent. Looking forward to the next part!
12/9/21, 9:21 AM
seriously, this is one if the best stories i've ever read! very well done! can't wait to read more.

12/9/21, 10:26 AM
@BiBear34 Thanks man!
12/9/21, 4:54 AM
Hot so far. Looking forward to seeing how it goes!
12/9/21, 3:57 AM
Me encantaron... quiero mas capítulos
Nov 24, 2021
11/27/21, 8:14 AM
It's a great idea but it all felt very quick - I'd have loved it if we could have spent more time seeing and experiencing the changes. I'd have loved to see how Brandon adapts to being a small twink from being a big tall muscular guy. I think it's a good starting point but I'd love to see it fleshed out more

12/9/21, 3:41 AM
@Growing Geek I agree with this comment.
12/9/21, 2:44 AM
Mmmmmmph! This was absolutely perfect! Now that we have Anthony's full backstory I'm looking even more forward to seeing him convert Callum from his little brother into a hairless caged collared slave boi! (Hopefully with plenty more gear like hoods, leather, rubber, gags etc too!)
12/9/21, 2:24 AM
It's off to a good start but I hope whatever top did this comes along and reveals himself otherwise this just seems cruel.
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12/8/21, 6:17 PM
Though everytime i come to this website is in hope of new chapters from Edits, I don't get any sadder when i see any new chapter written by you. You have a way with words that is unmatched and I can't get enough from it, whatever story you published lol. Thank you for another chapter!

12/9/21, 2:18 AM
Aww, thanks! The next chapter of Edits is drafted, but it still needs lots of polish. There's another story I've been writing on the side that will probably go up before that. @Anonymous
12/6/21, 4:30 AM
Missed this story. Was hoping Alan had a bit more sense return and could see him struggle or snap back to reality as the house took over him. Plus would love a bit more of the suit action like at the start of the story as I seem to remember being told we'd be getting a lot more of that and it be playing a role. However it seems to be getting less and less each time.

12/6/21, 4:06 PM
Oh, Alan's still fighting the house. There will still be old clothing in future chapters, but the story is really about the interactions between all the characters. What they wear isn't the main point of the story. @nerdysuitedbaby

12/7/21, 4:31 AM
@bluesuedewho that's good to hear I think I messaged or replied in chapter 3 and you told me there would be a lot more suits in the upcoming chapters. As the hashtag for suits while non-existent in this carrier have become less and less. However seems to be put on but then removed the very next paragraph like in this chart and the previous one you had him get dressed but remove immediately for sex. Then once where he got dressed and as soon as he was finished Rob comes in and tells him to strip. However do like the reaction of you look ridiculous take that shit off. Although with Rob, Alan and the ghosts I am curious as Rob's behavior modification was much faster then Alan's. However the ghost and gatekeeper keep praising Alan about how quick his changes were compared to others. Which took a few ghost days before his resistance or suspicions had been completely abandon. Rob though has only came into the house to save him and been dragged back to the house after his run in at the hotel which I'm curious to see why that was somehow stronger when the idea is that something pulled from the house effects wear off after time. He was cocky sure but didn't seem this forceful and feels like he is changing faster then Alan which ghost are praising him as a few days and he's circum to the ghost brainwashing if you will faster then anyone. I feel if this is the case Rob should have his head on better. I get the artifacts make them stronger and possibly the house. But even if that's the case Rob should be back to mostly normal rather then the occasional hiccup here and there on the first ghost day back. That or give a better reason as to why he's changed this much due to the hotel incident. Personal I would like to see that possibly the effects are slowly wearing off and he's getting more of his consciousness back. The artifacts not only make the ghost stronger, expand the world and in a way lock or make it harder for them to leave as now the exit point has been moved due to the expansion and they would have no idea where it is. Seeing how the ghost handles it regularly when they're not quick to their advances or take him moor by force. Making their world more real and can get that change as well. Just feel you have Rob there so might as well use him a bit better. Although love how clearly the servants are getting more and more control of the "master". Clearly subtly taking more and more control as they continue.

12/9/21, 2:15 AM
Thanks for the comment! If you check chapter 1 you'll see that there's something unique about Rob (the narrator) that makes him particularly susceptible to being changed (that's what the spirits keep commenting on). Alan got hit hard because Instructor mind-controlled him directly in the hotel. Effects from the house don't necessarily fade -- Alan broke the mind control with the help of a protective artifact Tweedale gave them. @nerdysuitedbaby