Recent Comments

12/8/21, 5:13 AM
Interesting premise, which I believe has potential, but the strength of the world building was lost due to grammatical errors. You should reach out to folks in the forum and look for some assistance. Just getting another pair of eyes on it could make this really hot!

12/8/21, 10:39 AM
Thanks for the feedback! This is my first try on writing erotics, and also my first time write a story in English. Not only grammatical errors, it also lacks many crucial elements of a good writeup...... I'll look for assistances on writings here, thank you! @rodjock
12/8/21, 8:21 AM
Great series in all sense of the word. It's compelling story telling, I want to know what happens next, and hot as hell keep up the good work cant wait to see how it ends.
Mar 2, 2017
12/8/21, 4:54 AM
This became one of my favorites!
Oct 14, 2010
12/8/21, 4:52 AM
Blufman pulls me into his writing just like the character in this story.
12/8/21, 3:02 AM
Fully agree with Nutiper and Time here (and admire their good taste)! You're doing a great job layering out fantastic planks of an amazing story and weaving it together. I'm incredibly excited to see where it goes!

12/8/21, 4:43 AM
I’ve got lots of plans, and I’m really glad that the parts are already coming together! There’s a lot of moving parts, but I think it’s worth it. Again, so good to see a comment from a writer I respect. Validates me a ton. @Dace
Nutiper
12/8/21, 2:39 AM
I confess I'm mildly distressed that this story (and this chapter in particular) is getting so few comments, because it's so damn *fun?* The world, and all its zany Chronivac-like effects, is just really enjoyable to read and "discover" chapter by chapter. And the characters themselves are playful and warm and hot, and really fun to read about! I've also enjoyed how (and especially in *this* chapter, lmao) every time the characters are presented with the disastrous "horny" option vs. the "no we shouldn't do that, let's be level-headed and reasonable!" option... they always act like they're going to go for the level-headed option and then, at the last second, find themselves thrown into the extravagantly horny option instead, and it's splendid and hilarious and *hot* and I look forward to every chapter you post!

12/8/21, 4:37 AM
As much as I, too, am distressed by the low engagement with my stories, it’s comments like this one that keep me going, from names I see affecting some of the best stories on this site. It seriously warms my heart and helps fire me to keep going on what was supposed to be my flagship story on this site—and still is! I have so many plans. The discovery aspect is a part of this story I really love to write. It’s a nice, soft introduction to the world of Consummation (and it’s one of the reasons it’s my flagship, because Consummation is basically my shared universe, bar a few stories). Also, I’m glad my characters are fun! I’ve had trouble differentiating characters in the past, but I really feel like I know and have a handle on these. Seriously, I’m so glad you’re enjoying this in all the ways I hoped people would—I’m looking forward to writing and posting more. @Nutiper
2_Zealots
12/8/21, 4:24 AM
This is like my new favorite series please continue it, finally a genie story where the genie is more active!
12/8/21, 12:35 AM
Downright heartwarming. What a sweet little romp with a super likeable (and, ADHD here, relatable) POV character. The way you narrate their sex was super hot too, really visceral and easy to follow. Thanks for another great chapter!

12/8/21, 2:59 AM
@tenser13 I'm so glad you enjoyed! Writing Emrys was *really* fun but I had to be careful to keep the narrative thread going while his mind wandered all over the place. I'm excited to come back to this series soon!
Jun 6, 2016
12/8/21, 2:51 AM
Moves fast. Deserves a follow up story.
12/7/21, 9:53 PM
I honestly don't think I've shipped a couple on this site as much as I do Gray and Archie. You've built their relationship and character really well that when time stopped, it's an instant smile for me. Also I love how much a few days of being in love with Gray had built Archie's self confidence in a good way. He went from questioning all his past actions to confidently saying that he's a more expensive slut than Dax. Love to see that lol.

12/7/21, 11:05 PM
@Zi19 can not agree more. I generally don't become invested in the over all relationships of the characters when reading on this site but I have to say I'm glued to my seat watching archie & gray grow into a power couple. Very talented writer.

Martin
12/7/21, 11:16 PM
@Zi19 I haven't read this series, yet, but after these comments, I plan to do it asap. I just wonder why it's not cross posted to GayCupid, if the relationship is that important in the series! Jack, do you want to change that perhaps?

12/7/21, 11:18 PM
@Martin Given some of the comments I've gotten posting it here I do not. There is a love story here but I am not willing to hear people complain about it for ten chapters for it to come back around. But I am glad you guys are liking it.