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Dec 5, 2021
12/6/21, 9:27 AM
Lord Robin is such a dumb slut, honestly goals. I need me some ghosts like this, life would be so much easier :(
12/6/21, 4:06 PM
Lol. Glad I've managed to write such an aspirational character! @HypnoticPrey
Dec 5, 2021
12/6/21, 10:12 AM
*Well* worth the wait! The plot thickens!
12/6/21, 3:57 PM
Thanks! Hopefully the wait for the next chapter won't be so long! @Norismo
Dec 5, 2021
12/6/21, 11:18 AM
I love this story, and this chapter was incredible! I like how the dominance/submission is complicated by the fact that Rob is nominally the "master" and the ghosts his "servants". Also, the fact that despite the ghosts clearly being suspicious and sketchy as heck, Rob's interactions with them have an affectionate and loving feel: is that all *just* brainwashing that he's oblivious to, or is that not giving Rob enough credit? (Well, based on his apparent inability to say no to Alan's orders at the end, it seems there have definitely been some pretty heavy mental changes.) Alan clearly thinks he knows just what to do and Rob doesn't, but it's not clear Alan isn't in over his head here. Him being an asshole to Rob in contrast to the ghosts is also neat and hot. I don't know exactly how I want it to end, but I'm looking forward to more!
12/6/21, 3:56 PM
Thanks! I've always wanted to write a story with a bottom who has a harem of tops to flip the typical script a little. Rob's attitude is a mix of his natural tendencies, deliberate interference from the spirits, and then some changes just caused by the nature of the house and its inhabitants. @drummer
Dec 5, 2021
12/6/21, 12:54 PM
Glad to see you continuing with this story. It’s turning into quite an intriguing mystery and all the more enjoyable for the steamy supernatural sex!
12/6/21, 3:50 PM
Thanks! I was a little worried the concept wouldn't work initially. @Ruffcub
Dec 1, 2021
12/6/21, 4:24 AM
the dick shrinking/cages were the best part and don't let anyone tell you otherwise ;) great story!
12/6/21, 1:49 PM
@Dcguy <3 glad you enjoyed it was fun to write. sometimes it's nice to explore other random kinks and i felt like cages and stuff was perfect for this story
Dec 1, 2021
12/6/21, 12:44 AM
Liked the story a lot. Since you asked: The pacing was perfect. I like a slow build. Not crazy about the shrinking cock/cock cage. Would have enjoyed more invasive action on the part of the patrons, including enjoying the (large) cocks of the lifeguards -- i.e., having at least some of the sex going in the opposite direction. I like the idea of the lifeguards acquiring big cocks, tits, plushy asses that are at all times available to the patrons. Of course, that's really a different story, but I assume you'll be writing more stories. I'll watch for them.
12/6/21, 1:48 PM
@gocarty aha thank you so much im grateful the pacing turned out okay - writing slower changes is much harder just because sometimes hypnosis in itself doesn't really get me excited to write. Also with some of the life guards having big cocks I sort of put the foundation for that possibility in the story (just like some lifeguards r obviously more important than others/boss the others around) and sex going in the other direction would be good to write. For now though i'm just probably gonna make more random stories that are fairly kinkier than this one ahaha
Dec 1, 2021
Jockmorphr
12/5/21, 9:53 PM
Really good story @burntoutmilk. Like everyone else, I liked Jacob's slow, gradual mental shift along with the lack of awareness about the physical and behavioral changes that were happening. I love a good cock shrinking/sph story, so I would have actually liked more detail about Jacob's junk getting smaller. Or that the shrinkage was intentional and part of the changes Mr. Thompson wanted to see. I don't know if you have plans to continue the story, but it would be fun to see if the changes continue (more muscle, less cock) and how the relationship between Jake and Lucas develops. To the point @Cutlerfan made, I could see them becoming the property of one of the members once they reach a certain age or level of development/control.
12/6/21, 1:45 PM
@Jockmorphr thank you! i wrote it on some level that the shrinking effects were somewhat intentional but didn't really make a concrete reason for the changes other than the sunscreen i suppose. Property of members is a pretty cool idea that i'll keep in mind but as for now i don't really have plans to continue this story just at the moment. More and more changes would be cool tho
Dec 6, 2021
12/6/21, 12:52 PM
Oh man. Poor Archie. Also, lucky Archie.
Jul 31, 2009
Zai
12/6/21, 10:17 AM
This is hot! Hot!! HOT!!! Just how it should be. White jock studs getting bitched and owned by a huge-dicked, muscled, handsome black daddy! A little tidbit to aid jacking off while reading this story. Look up some photos of those Texas Longhorn college studs in their see-thru, skin tight football uniform pants. You'll view some tasty white-boi ass framed in jockstraps AND their butts clefts easily seen.
Dec 5, 2021
12/6/21, 12:29 AM
I just wanted to chime in to tell the author to take heart - a lack of comments doesn't necessarily mean a lack of interest. Stories that instantly generate a lot of comments does not necessarily mean the story is well-loved, it could be any number of things. It might be controversial, it might be a *well-loved author* who people are very excited to see post a story, it might be a continuation of a story that people have been waiting for for months (or even longer) to appear, and lastly -it might strike a nerve and have made people upset. I can think of a few instances off the top of my head where a story generates a lot of comments and not really in a good way. Since you are writing a lengthy serialized story you must also keep in mind that the sheer number of chapters can be off-putting to potential new readers who are looking for a quick wank. Hopefully you grabbed your audience early on, when you do that they will tend to follow the story until the end (unless you upset them and they discontinue reading in which case you very much might get a comment expressing their disappointment). One trick that authors of serials use is to solicit feedback at the end of the story, ask your audience to vote on the direction the next chapter will take, ask the audience to suggest kinks they would you to include, or even invite them to suggest the fate of a character. Finally, on a technical note: in a serialized story once a tag is used it applies to all the stories in the series. People who have that tag blocked will not see any of your stories pop up in their feed. This is probably a good thing, but it can be unfortunate. Perhaps the author wanted to segregate a controversial kink into a single chapter of the story so that people who are turned off by it can easily skip it. But those who are blocking that tag because it is an extreme turn-off or a hard limit will not see the serial at all. It is something to keep in mind, but not something to obsess over.
Dylan
12/6/21, 7:05 AM
@amul hi Amul and you for your answer I was thinking about methods to get more interest, like a "real" author who tries to sell a novel, not just write for the fun of it. I now realize that tag "Brainwash" is sticking and might reduce the potential readers. But you are right, its there and it will stick. I guess i will just go on writing till i get tired of it ;-) Or as long as i get feedback ;-))))
12/6/21, 8:43 AM
Hey @Dylan - I saw amul's comment earlier, and I've been thinking about it a bit. I've had some success in getting comments on my stories, so I thought I'd share what works for me. - **Write the stories that you're excited to write.** If the topic of your story is interesting to you, it will be interesting to some other people. You will never please everyone, and you shouldn't try. Over time, the readers who love your stories will recognize your name and jump to read your new material. - **Write lots.** Some stories will be hits, and you might not even know why. I can't tell you how a story will be received before I publish it – I just publish it and see what the reaction is. Some stories don't get a ton of comments, some get plenty of feedback. As a bonus, I've found that the more I write, the better my stories get, and I get more feedback more often. - **Ask for comments.** Sometimes at the bottom of a story, I'll put a short paragraph asking people to comment. Comments are really what keep me going, and I'm upfront about that. Recently I've been using that space to pimp my Patreon, and I've noticed a decrease in the number of comments I get here. It doesn't hurt to tell people you like comments. - **Keep series' short.** Every series I've ever written has had a drop off in the number of readers with each chapter. When people lose interest, they're gone, they rarely skip a chapter and pick the story up later. Sometimes I split up the themes I want to talk about into different stories – otherwise I'm going to end up writing something too long to reasonably keep attention. When you do want a longer series, try to produce chapters frequently. My series' with the least drop off are the ones that I released daily or every couple of days. Other authors have said weekly is the best frequency and it works for them. You're going to have a pace that works for you. - **Write interesting summaries.** Your readers need to know what your story is about up front. I used to write summaries that tried to leave some mystery. Now I write summaries that actually summarize the story in the broad strokes. I won't give away the twists, but I will tell the reader what the story is about. Readers have a lot of choices and good summaries help them find stories they're interested in reading. Anyhow, I know that's a heck of a lot of unsolicited advice. I hope some part of it is helpful to you. And remember – this is just a bunch of people writing smut for eachother on the internet – have fun with it!
Dylan
12/6/21, 8:59 AM
@Derek Williams: Thx Derek! I guess i will use a few ideas i had and put this story to a well deserved rest ;-) before i start a new one. @All three of you guys: Ur giving me good advice i guess. I will at least try and do my best !