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12/5/21, 5:09 AM
Great writing.
12/4/21, 10:39 PM
> A lot of Dom’s got off on marking the other guy approach them. It makes sense, it’s a show of power. But I don’t play that game. If you want it come and get it. He’d have to make this small capitulation, this small first crack. > That's literally the exact game he's playing though. xD
12/4/21, 9:48 PM
Never a bad story from from @Kyle Cicero although it is hard to finish the story before I finish (but that is more a "me problem" than a story problem.
12/4/21, 2:32 PM
Really enjoying this story so far! I like the worldbuilding and the ties to some of the other Priapus lore that's been developped in other stories on the site. Ariel and Raavi have a very sweet (and hot) connection, and Talley seems like a fun little mischief-maker. There's some meta stuff and definition/exposition in here about different roles that I think is necessary but that comes across as a bit of an info dump rather than fitting quite as organically in the story, but I understand why its there. Great work! I'm looking forward to more!

12/4/21, 2:41 PM
I’m glad you noticed the Priapist connection! More on that as time goes on. Where did you see those bits? I’d love to do some edits to correct them. I think I intended to change them but forgot. Would you say that the times when I describe (1) the effect of secondhand Firecracker cum on those who swallow it and (1) the role of Sirens are most inorganic? Are there any others? Thanks so much for this praise! I’m glad you’re enjoying it. @time.to.occur

12/4/21, 3:08 PM
I just published an update to several portions—the effect of secondhand cum, the role of Sirens, street showers (just removed the entire redundant exposition point there) and when Ariel describes how he came into being a Firecracker toward the beginning with Raavi. If you have the time, please let me know if it flows better, but no worries either way! @time.to.occur

12/4/21, 9:40 PM
@Soren Fitz Those were exactly the parts that had stood out to me, and I think you've done a great job of keeping the information in while letting the reader connect those last dots!
12/4/21, 8:03 PM
Another top demoted to what he always should have been. Hot story Kyle, glad to have you writing again
12/4/21, 6:37 PM
this just seems mean
12/4/21, 6:32 PM
This is an excellent story, a good reminder to check the top ranked stories tab from time to time because you find gems like this that you missed!
12/4/21, 6:17 PM
Great as usual. Awaiting more, both from this and from Cock In A Box (hint, hint, :))
12/4/21, 6:16 PM
I love it that he doesn't have to hide it from his teammates, but I'm still rooting for him and Gray!
stan
12/4/21, 4:41 PM
man your story gets me going like no other. fucking love how that ego filled alpha male gets turned into a unsatiable slut for cock up his holes more and more with each chapter now even choking on his own cock wow