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12/3/21, 9:04 AM
first half reminds me so much of "My girlfriend's new master" from mcstories. Very hot story from you as always. Thanks for writing :) xx
Oct 10, 2021
boi98229
12/3/21, 6:51 AM
boi98229 11/4/21, 12:00 AM Thank you so much DomDad! What a wonderful experience and recounting. The fantasies created on this and its sister sites are extremely entertaining, but it is a rare treat to have someone tell us about their real experience, including how they felt and were transformed by it.
Ben
12/3/21, 5:20 AM
I have been your fan since I came across that Supernatural fic on Nifty, and I have read every entry of yours since. Superb work! Thank you for all the good time LOL

12/3/21, 5:58 AM
@Ben Thanks man!
12/3/21, 5:54 AM
Oooh, this looks fun. You painted two morally gray characters (during the first scenes, I found myself asking "Who exactly am I rooting for here?"). The magic is a fun twist, and I especially love the induction! I have a thing for classic inductions and guys getting sleeeeepy. ;D Amazing stuff!
12/3/21, 12:00 AM
Terrific story and idea, I love these scenarios. I do think you're falling into a trap that I also fall into and that's using overtly purple descriptors when simple ones would do. Calling an ass "bountiful" or the tip of a cock the "precipice" can work with the right framing, but when these $10 words get used too much it makes the writing sound overwrought. At its worst it can make a story exhausting to read. I can tell you want your images to be descriptive, but be selective of where you place emphasis and those special moments will stand out even more.

Adonis
12/3/21, 2:37 AM
@ThisisDiz I know exactly what you mean. My brain just hates seeing the same words over and over again. I have to find some kind of alternative version. I'll try to focus it more to just erotic scenes.

12/3/21, 3:33 AM
@Adonis I totally understand. Reusing the same adjectives and verbs is something that gets hammered into us as bad writing. Trouble is that we overcorrect and it sounds like we're writing out every synonym for words like "said", "large", or "climax" that could be found in a thesaurus.
12/3/21, 2:48 AM
I have very much been looking forward to the next chapter of this story and it didn't disappoint.
12/3/21, 2:45 AM
It was so nice to read! I kinda knew he would end up with his friend. :)
12/3/21, 2:22 AM
https://twitter.com/NYUfratguy/status/1454115894070808582?s=20
12/2/21, 11:49 PM
Very good job, your writing is improving incredibly quickly. Top-notch work on this one.

12/3/21, 12:51 AM
@amul thanks :) i was worried the pacing would be weird ahaha
12/2/21, 12:03 PM
Enjoyed the slow burn on this. One small nit: masseuse is the feminine form of masseur

12/3/21, 12:50 AM
@Morph lmao good catch. can't keep up with the french language and all its gendered words ahaha