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Dec 1, 2021
12/1/21, 2:34 PM
Sometimes with your stories, what really gets me is the little details. You are great at writing fast and tight without extraneous unnecessary stuff, but the reason you are so good at it is the little bits you throw in. “This was way too good to be true, but you don’t look a gift cock in the horse or whatever.” Totally in character, implies that Justin knows the saying but fucked it up, and it’s funny. “I don’t know,” Ben was saying. “Like, sure, I could do a threesome, but I’d totally be judging myself.” I can absolutely hear myself saying that and immediately started thinking about Ben in a particular, somewhat uptight, self-loathing, self-deprecating way. I love it! Thanks for posting!

12/1/21, 10:49 PM
Thanks @MonsterMash62! I planned this one out to a pretty strict word count, and I feel like I got it decently tight. On the old site, someone once told me I "write like a radio play", and that's the best compliment I've ever gotten. Like Strunk & White say – omit needless words. I'm glad you enjoyed the details. Like we've chatted about on Discord, one of the things I do in life is standup comedy – those details are there because sometimes I can't resist a punchline. I've never done a threesome either, for exactly the same reason as Ben. I'm glad it got Ben's personality across succinctly! Thanks for commenting. You know I'm a total fanboy for you.
12/1/21, 10:45 PM
I always enjoy your diaper stories. Things started off rather rough for Timmy, but it looks like he'll be alright ultimately.
12/1/21, 9:02 PM
I really liked this! I was just a little confused about whether Dan was actually cheating on Nate with his younger brother, or if that was just a fantasy that the app put into Nate's head. I also had no idea why the app creator would want to change Nate in this way, but presumably that will be answered in a further chapter!

12/1/21, 9:35 PM
@Hypnothrill thank you for your feedback! So I wrote it with the intention that Dan actually was cheating on Nate - the app had found Tom's OnlyFans and was showing Nate the videos on there, one of which was of him and Dan :) to be honest i put less stock into the app creator - i wanted to focus more on developing the family and their relationship, at least for the start of the story. So for now the behind the scenes of the app is less important than what it will do to the characters. but, maybe the creator will show up in future chapters :) thank you again for reading!

12/1/21, 9:50 PM
@FKH19 To me, that just seems like such a weird detail. Nothing we learn about Tom at the beginning leads us to believe that they're the kind of person who would cheat with their big brother's boyfriend and present the video evidence of it on a publicly accessible website. IMO, this kind of "normal family slides into perversion" story works a lot better when the characters aren't from the very beginning acting like someone in a porn film.

12/1/21, 10:14 PM
@Hypnothrill thank you for your opinion. i'm glad you liked the story as a whole :)
Dec 1, 2021
12/1/21, 12:29 PM
Incredible stuff! You write Justin's original mental state so well that the personality change into a jock is extra hot. Short, sweet, and packed with descriptions of attractive guys--what's not to like? :D

12/1/21, 10:14 PM
Thanks! The personality change was my favourite part of writing this, along with the ironic idea that all Patrick wanted was a hot jock to top him.
Anonymous
12/1/21, 9:18 PM
Shame it was just fantasy. Hoped there would be a reality warp in there too.? But hot nonetheless

12/1/21, 9:36 PM
@Anonymous remember that this is just the first chapter ;) thank you for your feedback! i'm glad you liked it
Nov 30, 2021
Anonymous
12/1/21, 4:51 PM
If it's perfectly okay for an author to publish a story on this site in which he fantasizes about all black men being permanently mentally lobotomized into mindless animals, how different is that from the real world murder of George Floyd on May 25, 2020 by white police officer Derek Chauvin, who pressed his knee into the neck of George Floyd for 8 minutes and 47 seconds, well past the point at which George Floyd had stopped breathing? Derek Chauvin treated George Floyd as if he was an animal, not a human being, and that's what this story wants you to believe: that black men aren't human beings. Is it truly sexually gratifying to think about all black men being permanently mentally lobotomized into mindless animals, or is it disturbing? If you are jacking off to this story and you have black friends, are you picturing them being mentally murdered and jacking off to that as well?

Martin
12/1/21, 5:10 PM
What you're saying, is basically that this story is horrible because the victims were specifically described as being black. Since there are many similar stories on this site which you obviously don't have a problem with, what you're saying is basically, that stories about these themes are fine UNLESS the victims are black. You seem to fail to see that this is some kind of differentiation on YOUR side which can be seen as quite problematic.

Anonymous
12/1/21, 5:26 PM
@Martin This story is objectionable because it singles out a specific, single ethnicity. If the ethnicity being singled out wasn't black, it would still be just as objectionable. The author of this story deliberately chose to apply this destructive fantasy to entire single ethnicity. It's a fantasy about ethnic cleansing and human history is replete with horrific, monstrous examples of ethic cleansing. It's one thing for a sexual fantasy to be about a single person having something done to them non-consensually or it applies equally to everyone; it's something else when a very specific ethnicity is the target with the goal of complete mental destruction.

Martin
12/1/21, 5:39 PM
I see the issue, I really do. However, common attributes are often used to select your victims in stories here on GSS. Sexual preference (gay, straight), opinion (homophobe), body type (twink, jock etc.). Discrimination and violence is horrible REGARDLESS of what you base the discrimination on. I understand that with everything that's happening, the topic about POCs is very sensitive. And for many people this alone justifies using a different standard for anything that concerns what people are defining as "POC". I don't buy that though. For me, separating people into POC and the rest is already a way of discrimination in itself. Selecting a group of people based on the ethnic or skin color is in no way worse or better than any other criteria. So if I'd be consequential with this, I must close the site. Because almost every single story contains an element of someone being taken advantage of, and people are fapping to that idea. You can be uncomfortable with that idea, and believe me, I've been many times. If the author of the story would convey the message that POC deserve to be treated that way (or in any way different than other people), then it would be blocked. But that's not the message of the author. Once again, this comment function is not a suitable way to discuss this. You can always go to the forum or to our Discord (into a public channel) and talk about this.

12/1/21, 9:11 PM
@I can completely understand why some readers find this racial element very upsetting. But it's literally just 2 words in the story. You can pretty easily do a "find and replace" and change "black" to "white" or "Irish" (speaking of another ethnic group once caricatured as monkeys). Honestly, even with the author's initial disclaimers about raceplay, I didn't even notice the racial aspect the first time I quickly read through the story.
12/1/21, 7:08 PM
Wow, i was never expected this side from archie's dad. You really know how to storytelling something so bad feel so good 👍

12/1/21, 8:21 PM
@Sufan haha thanks man!
12/1/21, 8:03 AM
I'm interested in how the story originally went. There wasn't a lot of build up to the old man, and the story speed up this chapter. It was still very good and creative, but definitively feel like changes were made during writing (that happens to me all the time).

12/1/21, 6:53 PM
@BobbyBlobfish Honestly, my hope was that the audience would respond with opinions and things they'd like to see so I could spend longer on the conversions and showcase a variety of transformations. Which was silly in retrospect. I didn't have the imagination to successfully populate the story with unique kinks and conversions so I decided to speed it up and end it soon.
12/1/21, 5:02 PM
Wow just wow. I'd write more but I need to clean up.

12/1/21, 5:06 PM
@TexMuscle haha
12/1/21, 4:58 PM
I love this series. I can't even predict what's gonna be the ending for this. Your writing is terrific!

12/1/21, 5:06 PM
@Rspark Thanks man!