Recent Comments

3/6/25, 5:39 AM
Just read this for the first time. Wow what an incredibly good story! Such great mind manipulation going on here.
3/6/25, 5:31 AM
This is a really fun concept! I love how extreme it's getting as the story proceeds
3/6/25, 4:28 AM
Such a hot story. I did find myself thinking about the alternate angle, where the black society falls under the trap of the other scientist's creation, tables turned....
3/6/25, 3:43 AM
Next chapter coming soon?
3/6/25, 3:24 AM
I was so happy to see this series updated!! I loved this chapter and I'm really enjoying the fine line being walked between arousal and fear. I second the praise for the dialogue too, it's super well written and the characters feel very rounded and alive! I can't wait to read more!!

3/6/25, 3:43 AM
@[JimsJorts](/user/show/10008527) Thank you! For the dialogue, I try to put myself in each character’s shoes, identify where their thoughts and emotions are at in the moment, and type what comes to mind- I think this method captures the flow of real life conversation well.
Apr 1, 2006
7/11/23, 3:46 PM
Pretty good story, but since the publication, the site changed style so much, the formatting became hard to read... :frowning_face:

3/6/25, 2:59 AM
@[BobbyBlobfish](/user/show/700733) Yeah, I came back to read this and the formatting unfortunately makes it impossible! I hope it gets revised.
3/6/25, 2:53 AM
Very nicely written as well as an enjoyable read. Thank you
2/27/25, 11:31 PM
Great job on this so far! Can’t wait to see where this one goes!

3/6/25, 1:50 AM
@[AlphaTim](/user/show/59327) Really glad you liked this one <3
2/27/25, 10:40 PM
Great ending for Bill and Steve. Can't wait for Phil and Andy's reality.

3/6/25, 1:49 AM
@[Cutlerfan](/user/show/14171) I think Phil and Andy's dynamic is my favourite in this one actually!