Recent Comments

3/6/25, 3:24 AM
I was so happy to see this series updated!! I loved this chapter and I'm really enjoying the fine line being walked between arousal and fear. I second the praise for the dialogue too, it's super well written and the characters feel very rounded and alive! I can't wait to read more!!

3/6/25, 3:43 AM
@[JimsJorts](/user/show/10008527) Thank you! For the dialogue, I try to put myself in each character’s shoes, identify where their thoughts and emotions are at in the moment, and type what comes to mind- I think this method captures the flow of real life conversation well.
Apr 1, 2006
7/11/23, 3:46 PM
Pretty good story, but since the publication, the site changed style so much, the formatting became hard to read... :frowning_face:

3/6/25, 2:59 AM
@[BobbyBlobfish](/user/show/700733) Yeah, I came back to read this and the formatting unfortunately makes it impossible! I hope it gets revised.
3/6/25, 2:53 AM
Very nicely written as well as an enjoyable read. Thank you
2/27/25, 11:31 PM
Great job on this so far! Can’t wait to see where this one goes!

3/6/25, 1:50 AM
@[AlphaTim](/user/show/59327) Really glad you liked this one <3
2/27/25, 10:40 PM
Great ending for Bill and Steve. Can't wait for Phil and Andy's reality.

3/6/25, 1:49 AM
@[Cutlerfan](/user/show/14171) I think Phil and Andy's dynamic is my favourite in this one actually!
Anonymous
3/5/25, 3:00 PM
I think I’m going to like that fox.

3/5/25, 10:52 PM
@Anonymous I think you might be right ;)

3/5/25, 11:23 PM
@[Blazargus](/user/show/10012784) maaaaybe
3/5/25, 11:22 PM
So thankful to have found this story! Hoping that there’s more someday?!
3/5/25, 3:45 PM
Nothing easy about writing a sex scene, but you recognized that our emotional investment in the characters makes the sex so much more powerful. Well done, my friend! And compliments to your dialogue -- reads very naturally, just like people talking.

3/5/25, 10:00 PM
@[absman420](/user/show/162063) Thank you! This is high praise, coming from a man who has written sex scenes that I still revisit to this day, at least a decade on from when he originally discovered them! I want my sex scenes to serve the plot and emotional beats of the story: I still want them to be fun and sexy and for guys to read them one-handed, but the sex should flow naturally from the emotions of a scene. Characters fuck because of something that happened between them, or something happens between them because they fuck. Like how in musicals, characters start singing when the emotions get too big for simple dialogue, but here, instead of breaking out into Sondheim, they reenact Tom of Finland pictures!
3/5/25, 5:55 PM
Nice job! I think you’ve got an interesting party idea here. Look forward to more of the adventure.

3/5/25, 9:54 PM
@[hypnopaladin](/user/show/10058683) Thanks!!!
Anonymous
3/5/25, 7:29 PM
Ohhh, I love it! I'm really enjoying this story! Personally, I'd love to know what happened to actor Chis Pewter from Chapter 2 in a later chapter (or in a spinoff, maybe?), I loved how the deeper he went into the interview, the progressively dumber he got. It would be really hot to see him on the set of a sequel, or in a later movie. I imagine the effects would be quite pronounced then!