Recent Comments

Anonymous
11/19/21, 6:26 AM
awesome start. can't wait to read more. while it's not for everyone, I think a hot stud that's fucked over and made/convinced to wear slutty sexy lace panties while he's used like a pussy bitch is damn hot. just something to think about/consider as you write new chapters.

Anonymous
11/21/21, 5:36 AM
Thanks @Anonymous. -JT
11/19/21, 10:00 AM
Great story. Tops turned into bottoms are the stories I like the best, along with cock shrink. I look forward to the next story.

Anonymous
11/21/21, 5:35 AM
Thanks @tanners92! -JT
Anonymous
11/20/21, 4:04 AM
Great story! Loved how you used the top's arrogance against him. Can't wait for the next installment.

Anonymous
11/21/21, 5:34 AM
Thanks @Anonymous! -JT
11/6/21, 7:40 PM
Well, I'm always a fan of big sub small top, so if Alex controls someone like a coach, principal, dad or whatever, that would be awesome~ About this, not bad! I hope Mr Arthur enslave his more beefy, masculine men to serve him :3c

11/21/21, 4:58 AM
Hi, @Udems! I'm into that too hehe, indeed, if you check carefully into the stories, most of the subs are bigger than the tops, both Mr. Arthur and Alex. However I've been thinking in introduce a character with some kind of authority so, stay tuned for 2022 season!
11/21/21, 4:46 AM
I wasn't expecting that twist! 🤩
11/21/21, 3:45 AM
i do love a great transformation from human to dick story
11/21/21, 1:39 AM
So good, but I could say that about all your stories. Love reading about Jese. Hope you come back to this.
11/20/21, 10:29 PM
Thank you for updating so quickly! I love how this is shaping up, especially the romance parts despite the manipulation.
11/19/21, 11:15 PM
Took a bit to figure out who was narrating as the perspective shifted, but other than that easily fixable issue, I found this really hot, sexy and arousing. An incredible buildup that I can't wait to follow.

11/20/21, 9:08 PM
@Essex I have edited it to try and make it easier to tell who the POV switches to. I'd appreciate if people gave it another read through and told me if it's clearer now than it was before.
Kods
11/19/21, 11:50 AM
@Johntheedoe I think I caught that at one point, but now that you said that, it makes it easier to notice. However, I'd say we've been introduced to many characters so quickly that it's hard to keep track of them all. At this point providing a POV Header switch is easier for the readers. That said, I don't think the technique you implemented is a bad one inherently, but would be better suited if the story had a smaller cast, or used with a cast the readership knows intimately well that they can pick up on the different POV with context clues ( I.e. setting, their frame of mind, other charaters their with.) Even then might still trip up people. I think it's usually easier to do this techinque in third person though because all "I"s can run the same.

11/19/21, 1:22 PM
@Kods Agreed. The parts of the story I could follow were really hot, but I found it impossible to keep track of all the characters, and after about the second narrator shift, I just gave up trying to figure out who was talking.

11/20/21, 9:04 PM
@ Kods @Hypnothrill I've edited in some more lines to hopefully make it clearer who the POV switches to. If you guys would be willing to give it another read through and tell me if it's better or not I'd be grateful.