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11/13/21, 12:32 AM
Just read this on MC Stories. Its super hot. I think the obliviousness of things in this is what I super enjoy. Though the first person perspective of the sub is not something I normally want there is something here that makes it fun. (Maybe because even as we are following the sub I still think of the hypnotist as the 'big main' - I don't know, all I know is that its hot. lol) The fact that he goes from Mr Creepy to Master in a sort of slow but fast passed way is part of it. As is the whole "I know brother is bobbing up and down on something but I am not sure what it means" element. I also super like the nature of Vincente and his slow hypnotizing of all those dudes who like insult him and such. I know we don't see his POV but at the same time I can imagine the fun and such he is having making dudes into good boys. Like Ryan, I would totally enjoy seeing the scenes of Ryan being a good boy. I do wish there was some rimming. Especially if their is a disconnect between what is going on and what they think is going on. (So I do have to admit I didn't get all the way through on the reading cause things distracted me. It was that hot. Going to have to read it some more. lol)

11/14/21, 5:56 PM
@Heru Kane I've tried writing in third-person before and it didn't go nearly as well. I find it much easier to write from the sub's perspective where you don't get any insight into what the hypnotist is doing or thinking. It's possible I could still write in third-person in a way that avoids describing the hypnotist too much, but I definitely find it harder. That might just be lack of practice, mind you. As for rimming, I know a lot of tops enjoy it, but I've never gotten into that...to me, it just seems gross, so I have a hard time describing it in a positive way. I should probably read a few stories where the top rims the bottom and see if I can get better at writing that. Of course, because I find it gross, I have no problems having the bottom rimming the top. I've already got at least one such scene planned, but I might make it two...haven't decided yet what Ryan and Vicente will be doing together, so I might add something there.

11/15/21, 2:35 AM
@RobinHood70 That's all cool! Honestly, I just wanted you to know that this was fascinating and fun and sexy. All three chapters to be honest were great, though in slightly different ways. The set up is fascinating and fun and sexy. Like REALLY sexy. Like enjoy ti a bunch of times sexy. Also a hypnotist that sets it up so that the guys he likes finds serving him to be hot is super hot. And yeah, Ryan is an interesting character. The few scenes with him were cool. Also I get it, not everyone is the same, so yeah, it is what it is. There was enough fun in this that even lacking the rimming stuff I love the story here was fun, very fun!) I just wanted you to know that I super enjoyed it. It was sexy set of stories.
11/14/21, 11:11 PM
I already told you I reread this earlier, but I just had to leave a comment to express how much I loved your description of Seeders and what the "pregnancy" terms mean in this world. You manage to pack in so much fun along with intriguing world-building!

11/14/21, 11:50 PM
I’m really happy about this! I’ve worked hard in this world for a long time and I’m glad it shows—and that it’s hot, too. I’m glad I’m keeping it fun! @Razz TFs
11/14/21, 5:21 PM
As always, your transformations are so clever and fun! You didn't drag it out or make it overly repetitive; their dynamic really helped keep it fresh the whole time. And I enjoyed the times that you waxed romantic on their relationship dynamic; it really upped the romance factor of the story. This was wonderful!

11/14/21, 11:14 PM
@Soren Fitz you're too sweet!! and i can't help but fawn over their relationship. i'm super excited to post the "conclusion" of this little episode at the end of the month
11/14/21, 7:58 PM
i live to serve the virus
Bloop
11/14/21, 7:41 PM
i live to serve the virus
11/14/21, 6:53 PM
Ok, I'm just commenting here again because I had to read this amazing story all over again and this is really the best. You're writing about all of my favorite kinks here: exhibitionism, dumb jocks, clueless and oblivious jocks, power bottoms, accidental sex and casual sexual accidents, hot guys in slutty and skimpy clothes who are absolutely clueless about it, big dicks and the game angle which only makes everything hotter. I really can't wait for the next chapter! Could you please link me to your Patreon? I'd love to check that out :)

Adonis
11/14/21, 6:58 PM
Oh my goodness! You are too sweet. I haven't set up my Patreon yet, so there's nothing on there currently. However, there are other stories that I'm working on, and I'm trying to make them more in depth and descriptive. Again, thank you for your praise. @Elmara
11/14/21, 5:47 PM
Nice!
Martin
11/14/21, 7:16 AM
This sounds really interesting. I really hope it will be appreciated!

11/14/21, 5:46 PM
@Martin I'm sure it will! :D
boi98229
11/14/21, 5:37 AM
I've loved this story from the beginning. The implied recognition that there may be so many levels of mind control/training that involve all parts of who we are is really arousing. (I would love to know more about the real science of mind control/training.) The slave who has been testing and experiencing the machine for some time is disturbed in the middle of this chapter's session. He is suddenly concerned about losing his Master as his mind too is enslaved. Will his Master continue to be the same dominant person if he becomes a slave to the machine? While he is happy to share the joy and pleasure he experiences, he does not want to lose his Master. I thought that perspective, which of course the machine anticipated and controlled, was a thrilling new wrinkle to the story. In this case I mean 'thrilling' in both the sense of imagined erotic pleasure and in a Stephen King sense of extreme concern and a spark of fear about how far this enslavement process will go. This wrinkle throws a whole new question about trust in a D/s relationship. Thinking back to the beginning of the story, I don't recall that we yet know much at all about the persons/organization that has developed this machine in the first place. Still one of my very favorite stories!! Thanks so much!

11/14/21, 2:35 PM
@boi98229 I so appreciate you taking the time to respond to this story! It's really encouraging and helps me write more ^^! I know a fair bit about hypnosis and behavioural training, and about false memories and things like that -- the human mind is amazing in its capacity for flexibility. One of my favourite moods in erotica is definitely that slight edge of fear, forbiddenness or uncertainty to lend a bit of conflict to the story. I like it when characters know on some level that things might turn out badly for them but that they're so aroused and into it that they can't bring themselves to care, or can't quite escape. (Of course, in IRL D/s, I like being able to trust my Dom pretty well completely, which is totally different). I made the choice not to say too much about the sinister orgs/people building these mind control machines to keep the focus on the experience of this one character, but I suspect their goal is mass mind control ^^. It's really nice to hear that this is one of your favourite stories! <3
11/14/21, 2:03 PM
GREAT Story! I love this - I hope there will be a sequel some day. :P