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11/14/21, 7:58 PM
i live to serve the virus
Bloop
11/14/21, 7:41 PM
i live to serve the virus
11/14/21, 6:53 PM
Ok, I'm just commenting here again because I had to read this amazing story all over again and this is really the best. You're writing about all of my favorite kinks here: exhibitionism, dumb jocks, clueless and oblivious jocks, power bottoms, accidental sex and casual sexual accidents, hot guys in slutty and skimpy clothes who are absolutely clueless about it, big dicks and the game angle which only makes everything hotter. I really can't wait for the next chapter! Could you please link me to your Patreon? I'd love to check that out :)

Adonis
11/14/21, 6:58 PM
Oh my goodness! You are too sweet. I haven't set up my Patreon yet, so there's nothing on there currently. However, there are other stories that I'm working on, and I'm trying to make them more in depth and descriptive. Again, thank you for your praise. @Elmara
11/14/21, 5:47 PM
Nice!
Martin
11/14/21, 7:16 AM
This sounds really interesting. I really hope it will be appreciated!

11/14/21, 5:46 PM
@Martin I'm sure it will! :D
boi98229
11/14/21, 5:37 AM
I've loved this story from the beginning. The implied recognition that there may be so many levels of mind control/training that involve all parts of who we are is really arousing. (I would love to know more about the real science of mind control/training.) The slave who has been testing and experiencing the machine for some time is disturbed in the middle of this chapter's session. He is suddenly concerned about losing his Master as his mind too is enslaved. Will his Master continue to be the same dominant person if he becomes a slave to the machine? While he is happy to share the joy and pleasure he experiences, he does not want to lose his Master. I thought that perspective, which of course the machine anticipated and controlled, was a thrilling new wrinkle to the story. In this case I mean 'thrilling' in both the sense of imagined erotic pleasure and in a Stephen King sense of extreme concern and a spark of fear about how far this enslavement process will go. This wrinkle throws a whole new question about trust in a D/s relationship. Thinking back to the beginning of the story, I don't recall that we yet know much at all about the persons/organization that has developed this machine in the first place. Still one of my very favorite stories!! Thanks so much!

11/14/21, 2:35 PM
@boi98229 I so appreciate you taking the time to respond to this story! It's really encouraging and helps me write more ^^! I know a fair bit about hypnosis and behavioural training, and about false memories and things like that -- the human mind is amazing in its capacity for flexibility. One of my favourite moods in erotica is definitely that slight edge of fear, forbiddenness or uncertainty to lend a bit of conflict to the story. I like it when characters know on some level that things might turn out badly for them but that they're so aroused and into it that they can't bring themselves to care, or can't quite escape. (Of course, in IRL D/s, I like being able to trust my Dom pretty well completely, which is totally different). I made the choice not to say too much about the sinister orgs/people building these mind control machines to keep the focus on the experience of this one character, but I suspect their goal is mass mind control ^^. It's really nice to hear that this is one of your favourite stories! <3
11/14/21, 2:03 PM
GREAT Story! I love this - I hope there will be a sequel some day. :P
Jan 6, 2019
11/14/21, 1:23 PM
Awesome! I'm hoping for a sequel and moooore details of the team, the coach and the fucking all between them.
11/14/21, 12:36 PM
Sounds like a great app to have... But some more details or even a sequel would be amazing. What happens if some of "New-Jack"'s old friends keep looking for him? What about the "fun" mentioned in the end of the story?