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11/9/21, 11:40 PM
Sorry, your a terrific writer & I love the general theme of your story, but since I'm not that into rimming, this was not what I expected. Wish it would have dealt more with the dad's drinking & more general depravity, etc...but your the author so it's not my call. Would have loved for the son to become more like his dad!!!

11/10/21, 3:34 AM
@little tiny tim Thanks for always being so willing to let me know how the reading is going. I hope our tastes align again in the future!

11/10/21, 4:40 PM
@S. Q. Neemie Thank you for being kind enough to read your readers comments...I just felt that since you had made a point of mentioning the dad's heavy drinking & his son's aversion to it in several chapters, Tanner would have taken advantage of this by turning the kid into a heavy drinker himself! I would have loved Tanner to be there to instill new low-moral values in both father & son ! This would have opened the door to some heavy, dirty & debotched drunken sex! Also, the mention of the filthy house offered all sorts of possibilites in the boy starting to accept more of a piggish lifestyle [perhaps even 'gainer-porn???] Other than it being a rimming , B&D & S&M story, I didn't feel the overall perversion I was so looking forward to. Also the father & the pastor might be brought together by Tanner to develop some ideas for their sons 'moral-development'. Of, w course , whatever you come-up with, I'll continue to be a faithfull reader & again 'thank you'...
11/10/21, 2:54 PM
This metaphor says it all, "now that Amazon was spreading its tendrils everywhere, the malls had just turned into dried-out husks, empty shells of their former selves". Love this story and all your Sci-Fi themed writings. My suggestions: The Thing, War of the Worlds (not to be confused with H.G. Wells' The War of the Worlds), Skyline, District 9, Logan's Run, Scanners, They Live.
Anonymous
11/10/21, 1:58 PM
beautiful story man. sooooooo good!!! i really hope there is a sequel
Anonymous
11/10/21, 1:28 PM
You can't stop this now bro
11/10/21, 1:00 PM
I agree with the previous comments: this is a well-written story, very funny and sexy and unexpected. Lance and Nigel arguing about Randall's transformation as "Frankenstein" is hilarious, particularly as Clay frustratedly insists, "FRANKENSTEIN was the DOCTOR!" This is a really clever nod to a cultural joke/misunderstanding that has been running now for over two centuries. The manner in which the characters come to inhabit their Mariposa-induced 'costumes' is great. Psychology and action go hand-in-hand and I am sure that the guys will have a wild Halloween night with unexpected surprises. Thanks for the new Mariposa story and please keep the chapters coming!
Simon
11/10/21, 11:41 AM
Brilliant writing and terrific plot! Wouldn't it be great if this could happen for real? I'd love to meet Chaz and Nick and succumb to their brainwashing. More please!
Cutiepie183
11/10/21, 10:58 AM
another great chapter to a super hot story!! Wow can't wait to see what happens next...
Anonymous
11/10/21, 10:30 AM
This was amazing!
11/10/21, 10:02 AM
One of my favourite stories that I keep 'coming' back to. I love the fact the reader figures out the character is trapped in a spider's web before the character does (or doesn't in the case of Travis). I also like the fact that any female characters are written out before they even appear. Please keep writing!
11/10/21, 6:50 AM
Great chapter! I admit this is not my favorite story of yours (I think the complete lack of resistance and not much time being spent in the main characters' heads are reasons why), but a Hypnothrill tale is ALWAYS hot stuff. Write what YOU want, and the rest will follow! :)

11/10/21, 9:59 AM
@Feed Your Head Interesting point about the lack of resistance. I think that's not entirely true, because Eduardo is certainly putting up a LOT of resistance, but Juan and Andrew (the two gay boys) were certainly easy to turn, and even Daniel didn't put up that much resistance; he was just slower to change because he was initially straight. I'm still using a lot of free indirect discourse to get into the characters' heads (as I usually do when writing 3rd person stories), but I think the difference here might be that I'm not just limiting the perspective to a single focalizing character (as I normally would). Again, this is partly because of the photos I was working with, but I wanted to include some scenes in which Daniel wasn't present, and for that I needed to dip into Juan, Andrew, and Eduardo's heads as well. In the last part, I spend a bit more time in the Manager's head, which is unusual for me, in that I normally don't flesh out my mind controllers this much or give them specific motivations.