Recent Comments

Anonymous
11/6/21, 6:11 PM
Love where you’ve taken this story so far! Chapters feel like they’re a little short, but if it keeps us coming back for more I’ve no objections ;)
11/6/21, 5:46 PM
Excellent addition! Glad for another story!
A thing
11/6/21, 5:41 PM
reading this was a journey! i really enjoyed it!
11/6/21, 1:10 PM
Wow. Just found this. Martin, I really hope you can find a way to finish this.

Martin
11/6/21, 5:34 PM
@Beaner Thanks. There are so many stories I really should continue. This is one of them. I'm really glad that you liked it!
Jun 24, 2013
boi98229
11/6/21, 5:10 PM
Given my mind control, hypnosis, enslavement, and hair fetishes, this story fit me to a tee! It couldn't have been hotter! That said, your imagination and writing skills made it all happen! My only suggestion which could make the story better, again per my own preference, would be to make it longer. Thanks for a great story!
11/6/21, 5:04 PM
Bwahahaha! These stories just get hotter each time. This one was perfect. Soooo sexy.
11/6/21, 5:04 PM
Thanks for the feedback peeps. I made more edits to keep it in third person and hope I fixed the issues.
11/6/21, 1:51 PM
I wanted to like this but as Razz TFs pointed out above, the change of perspective (1st, 2nd and 3rd person) was really distracting and made it quite hard to get into the flow. It’s a shame because it was otherwise a great premise.

11/6/21, 4:45 PM
@Ruffcub let me see if I can make some more edits. Sometimes things get missed in the editing process. Thanks for pointing it out.
11/6/21, 4:22 PM
Stunningly hot. I didn't know about your previous stories but I'm definitely going to read them and I look forward to future ones!
11/6/21, 3:46 PM
Oh God, this was the one I was waiting for. I can't wait to read it. I need my morning coffee though. Excited!