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10/23/21, 2:27 PM
Very clever take on the topic :D Good to see you have a Patreon as well now! More Derek Williams stories is more better <3

10/23/21, 10:47 PM
Thanks @Transformheaven - I'm always happy when a new angle works. As for the Patreon, it's an idea I've been playing with for a long time. I wanted to do it in a way that lets me clear some time in my life so I can write more. I'll admit, the idea of somehow getting enough subscribers on there to let me write full time is the fantasy, but let's see where it goes.
Anonymous
10/23/21, 3:03 AM
excellent work thanks

10/23/21, 10:43 PM
Thank ye' sir!
10/23/21, 1:46 AM
Normally not a huge fan of dumbing down stories (and why do they always end up as strippers?) but the way this guy talked himself into not wanting to be a nerd was clever, different, and very well done.

10/23/21, 10:43 PM
Hey @amul - glad you enjoyed this one. Charlie's not a stripper - he's a gogo boy, but I get your point. For me, it's because I like to take a guy from reasonably intelligent to being dumb, slutty, and musclebound. With qualities like that, it's usually a good fit to give them a job like dancer or stripper or escort.
Evan
10/22/21, 9:52 PM
I loved this. Great piece. Perfect pacing and nice take on a dumb down scenario. Very creative! Thanks for writing.

10/23/21, 10:39 PM
Thanks @Evan. I love dumbing down, but I also love keeping it fresh!
10/22/21, 9:37 PM
Great fun! I enjoyed that the physical transformation happened completely before he was confronted with the mental, although I wish he'd been a little more distracted by his awesome new body. Well done.

10/23/21, 10:33 PM
Thanks @absman420! I'm a little frustrated with how much setup I've been doing in my stories, so I decided to jump right into the action on this one. I was sort of thinking that Charles would be so mentally focussed he'd barely let the body distract him, but yeah... Charlie is definitely the kind of guy who would be distracted by his own thick pecs...
10/23/21, 10:00 PM
I'm loving this story. Some great classic mind-control elements. Well done!
10/23/21, 8:22 PM
What an awesome story! Tiny-dicked bodybuilders are my absolute favorite, and this one had a sweet ending to boot.
10/23/21, 7:49 PM
I agree with Italianstalian, just really great, fast paced.
10/23/21, 7:09 PM
Jack, hot profile pic there man. Imagining you as Clark in your story. Hope you suffer well.
Anonymous
10/23/21, 4:50 PM
I need to brainwashed like them