Recent Comments

10/20/21, 6:50 PM
Very hot. looking forward to more about the hunters storyline too!
10/19/21, 7:53 PM
Such a hot story. are there going to be more parts.

10/20/21, 4:16 PM
@Jonanator Thank you. I will probably publish the next part this weekend.

10/20/21, 6:03 PM
@DoIHavePower Can't wait
10/20/21, 5:27 PM
I was looking Forward to this chapter and it did not Disappoint. Please keep writing this story, I love the writing style so much.
10/20/21, 4:45 PM
super sexy, has my favorite kink AND has an adorable romantic ending! yes i love this 10/10 will be cumming again!
10/19/21, 7:49 PM
The idea is solid (i love reprogramming stories), but i'm sorry to say it needs some work. There are a bunch of weird word choices that make me assume the author might not speak English natively. Those could be fixed with an editor or someone else proofreading the story. Personally I would like to see more brainwashing in the story. It happens really fast and could use some elaboration or something. Maybe more about the app or Brandon's struggle or just more of Frank breaking Brandon's mind and then rebuilding it. The last bit of resistance at the end was fun and left room for more induction.

10/20/21, 5:14 AM
@Delianborn I totally agree with your analysis. The story contains some very hot ideas, but it would benefit from being revised.

10/20/21, 4:43 PM
@Delianborn Thank you for your feedback. You're right. I don't have English as a native language. But I will try to be more careful in my choice of words in the next chapters. :)
10/19/21, 10:57 PM
First thing first, its hot. I'm a fan of big sub small top, and if you add that the big one is black? Thats even better <3 That being said, it feels a bit rushed and the conversion could be more low paced to enjoy. I enjoyed it, non the less :3

10/20/21, 4:37 PM
@Udems Thank you. I will try to be more slow paced in the next chapters
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10/20/21, 3:51 PM
Like most of the other readers commenting here, i thought your story, writing, and imagination were outstanding, but i hated the ending. True that we are writing and reading fiction, but too often fiction can reflect closely enough with reality that it can be really upsetting and onerous. I, for one, am really really tired of evil narcissistic sociopaths who manage to dupe so many people and get away with it. It fans the flames of my fears about such people getting away with shooting someone openly on 5th Avenue or encouraging people to drink bleach, spread a deadly disease, and then not only get away with it but apparently get rewarded in life for it. In reality i love to spend time with friends, neighbors and family, but at the same time assiduously avoid neighbors who tend to be intentionally mean-spirited. I use this site as a break from reality. You are a definitely a good writer with a great imagination and mind for detail, and i probably won't read any more of your work.
10/20/21, 3:22 PM
cant wait for more! phenomenal story so far
10/20/21, 2:49 PM
Hi there!! I love your stories so much. I was wondering if you would be interested in doing something together. I am a amateur illustrator and sketcher and I would love to illustrate, or use images to illustrate your stories. for examples of my work https://www.deviantart.com/abhsketches
10/20/21, 1:33 PM
WOOF PLEASE MAKE MORE MASTER