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naturallyInconsistent
10/14/21, 5:16 PM
I once had shoulder length hair. But back then I had not yet a dom to shave it for meow. It would be so nice to have someone vibrate meow to shaving. The rhythmic bliss would be amazing. You are making it difficult for meow to endure this locktober. Chains, piercings and tatts, hawtttt
Oct 11, 2021
naturallyInconsistent
10/14/21, 5:11 PM
Dom bottom creating Submissive tops! OOooooo! To sell! I'm straining a in my cage and the precum passes through my underwear and made a spot on my jeans.
Anonymous
10/14/21, 4:33 PM
Love this story! Hope there's more to come soon.
10/14/21, 3:47 PM
Hmmm. Since the story is more transitioning to something a bit different and I've already kinda pointed out some criticism you thought was too harsh earlier, I'll just give some suggestions this time on things that could help strengthen your current pathway of plot development in the story without changing it. 1. Since you're going a bit into hypnosis to explain the cracks in the story, there's no real need to be frugal with it. Whether it's musk control from the cinnamon or unmentioned things later explained, push more into the mind scrambling mechanic. He could even be a werewolf or supernatural being if you like. 2. Instead of acting like its inevitable he'll keep fighting, if you're going the approach of a more mind affect kind of deus ex machina, then let the officer lose completely already. Then use bondage toys, plugs, and restraints (I don't think his paws were unlocked yet actually as a reminder) to keep the teasing going, keep the ban on speech, and give him an aphrodisiac to make him confused on his horniness. Regardless if the interest is to keep writing about abusing him or not, you can justify it as him wanting it for unexplainable reasons and seeking it out. Could culminate it with an inner monologue fight inside the officers mind. The BDSM aspect could help lessen the cruelty that some of the characters have presented so it feels both parties feel pleasure at least. 3. If instead the goal is more the diaper humiliation then constantly giving him laxatives and making him drink a lot to keep peeing and excreting several times each day. This could be used to combine with regressing his body from all the muscle loss and such. Finally as an aside I think it'll benefit your story since you keep alluding to it, to introduce either the other diaper pup or one of the other pups (or all) as a prior project of Titan to kind of highlight what his future has awaiting for him and what they used to be like. This could help make it feel more like he is more of a mysterious person who's been doing this for a long time. A slight conversation with the anonymous person at the station of why this is happening or a progress report could add some intrigue too, maybe even while the officer is using some lube or his saliva to masturbate Titan, showing he's completely unaware of his surroundings due to a mental affect. Trigger words arent a bad thing to introduce to the pack mechanisms. Don't forget to rehood the officer, btw. Curious to see how it develops.
Anonymous
10/10/21, 1:43 PM
Option 1. Will be fun to see what the frat bros do in this based upon their experiences in the past games. Given how Greg got somewhat of what he wanted and can get more into his ideal body by doing this. And how frequently Prideful Trevor gets fucked into submission, just seeing his reactions to being constantly emasculated and disrespected is fun. Doesn't even have to be substantial him just saying "No! You will respect my Authoritaeee" as he gets fucked by a transformed frat boy in the background of a scene is a nice thought. **This is the one that has my vote.** Option 2: Has a chance to just be a fun time, ESPECIALLY with the random permanent trick effect. Option 3: Demons are fun in these stories. Especially if someone like Dan makes a deal to get a fully functional pussy and how that could affect the game and his life. Or Trevor making a deal to get a temporary nub and then get emasculated by one large rod demon, or if a Demon Trevor thinks he can control outsmarts him and permanently or temporarily takes something from him, ect. A fun time all around.

easdf
10/14/21, 3:03 PM
@Anonymous Why punishing Trevor though? He's so sweet
10/13/21, 2:17 AM
Well we've definitely sped up too quickly but it's pretty clear that the gay spiral component can't really realistically happen in this situation all things equal. I have to wonder if it might be better to include the fantasy element of hypnosis ear buds constantly in or during sleep since you're pushing for it to just happen through abuse. We've got pretty far away from pup play too now and I still think it would have been better to try a good cop approach and punish Bright and Ruby while theyre in headspace. Maybe trying to build a headspace for the officer while in bondage might be a good pathway.

10/13/21, 2:49 AM
....dude can you just go elsewhere? These scathing comments are killing my desire to use this site and post anything. If your not enjoying this why not go elsewhere?@Astradei

10/13/21, 10:23 AM
I don't know what your goal is here nitpicking everything about the story. Me personally this is one of my most favorite series I've read on here and I think the author has done a fantastic job in displaying a realistic, plausible breakdown of the police man. It simply hasn't shifted from one chapter of the police man resisting and the very next chapter he's full on pup, it's a slow burn and has been paying off in great style. Also looking at your page, I don't see a single piece written by you, so who are you to judge? If the author is reading this, you are very talented in what you do, and you have a gift. I love this story and so do many others. Block out uneducated hate like this and do what you do boo :)@Astradei

10/14/21, 4:10 AM
Feedback doesn't have emotion behind it in this context. I recognize its strangely common on this website to post praise but not actual constructive criticism or feedback on content, but this kind of stuff is basic for anyone writing. Being upset at the assessment, analysis, and thoughts of others will avail you in no way. Imagine if I actually gave an insult or some such. A professional critic would be well over a hundred times harsher than anything I wrote. Yet, they're dealt with by writers of all sorts constantly with a smile. Feedback means someone finds value in your construction. Otherwise they'd not waste their words. @Alpha Artemis Reporting someone because they made a comment you didn't like based on their perspective of something you wrote and posted publicly... This makes little sense. There is a comment system and it is intended for use. It isn't trolling to make a comment on something you read. It isn't scathing or hostile either. Far more people than comment will read your work. Many will have thoughts. If you heard their thoughts and it was disagreeable would that alone break you? You value your work and are proud of it. The moment anyone reveals anything to the public it is subjected to scrutiny. That isn't harassment.

Martin
10/14/21, 7:45 AM
@Astradei @Artemis I understand perfectly well that you want to get feedback to your stories and of course that the feedback is constructive. I understand that comments like the ones written by Astradei can be received as annoying, however, he takes a lot of time writing them and he obviously spent quite some time reading your stories and to think about them. As they're not offensive or break any rules, I will not remove them. However, I'd ask you, Astradei, to be aware that there is a human being on the other side and that they put a lot of personal energy and time into these stories. Stories are our children, we're proud of them, but in the end, they're short stories focused around sexual kinks. We authors want to please our readers and ourselves with those stories. So we should not expect those stories to be without flaws. Constructive criticism is more than welcome, but please make sure to give the author the feeling that his work is appreciated and don't be too nitpicky, ok? It would really be a loss for us all, if authors leave just because they have the feeling that their work is not appreciated. /edit: What I can confirm that Astradei has been around for quite some time. He didn't create an account just to troll, he's obviously spending a lot of time on the site. His comments are in general more on the harsh side, not just for Artemis' stories. Again, I'm not going to delete these comments, but I'd like to ask you, Astradei, to be more empathic to the authors and consider that they do this for fun and for the benefit of us all, ok?

10/14/21, 3:02 PM
While I don't particularly see my comments as harsh or cruel so much as observations based on the context, it is true that I don't go around sharing praise all the time and just get to the point. Enough people do that after all and I rarely remember to even comment. Even so, since you've asked it of me, I'll attempt to be less blunt as my goal obviously isn't to denigrate anyone. @Martin
10/14/21, 2:51 PM
I am liking how Christian resistance is being eaten away. how he is accepting his name Skippy
10/4/21, 3:47 PM
Love this series! I keep checking back since I can't wait for the next part. loving the corruption element and can't wait to see what else is in store!

10/4/21, 4:32 PM
@Kurtis311 Hey, thanks man...feeling a little down about writing in general and this story in particular, and your comment was really well-timed to give me a shot of enthusiasm and self-confidence. Really appreciate it.

Anonymous
10/9/21, 6:09 PM
@S. Q. Neemie Just spent the last few days reading your stories, lol, and I love them! You really nailed what I love about incest and corruption kink.

10/14/21, 1:48 PM
@ Hey, dude, really glad you enjoy them. They've been fun to write. :)
10/6/21, 10:07 PM
Saw you were a little down on this story and a lot of people going anti-Tanner here in the comments and thought I'd drop by and offer some encouragement. I've been a reader of this site for a long time (only have one story written, how do you get ANY writing done when you're turned on?! I'm literally a professional writer and my dick just goes "then just write that they have sex and say the end so you can touch yourself dude" basically every time I try to write a fantasy down) and my favorite stories are the ones that serve as metaphors for queerness. I don't know about you, but I thought I was straight until I hit puberty and my own personal Tanner came along and showed me, over and over, how very wrong I was. This is one of, if not the hottest stories on this site for me. If it was real life, or a non-erotic story, I'd be anti-Tanner too, he's a psychopath. But as fantasy? Let me tell you, I was actually a little disappointed to find out in this chapter that there's ANY sort of chance he loses. I love how he seems to derive power from embarrassment and humiliation, and the way he forces his victims' minds to justify everything he puts them through but lets them keep that nagging sense that something's NOT QUITE RIGHT HERE. The scene where he's got all of the boys kissing and play-wrestling like boy band porn twinks then REMINDS them of how much they shouldn't be doing it is one of the sexiest, most honestly RELATABLE mindfucks I've ever read here. I especially loved how Ethan gave in almost right away, all Tanner had to do was poke at his need to be seen as cool. And that little note of hope in Devon's voice as he hesitantly ASKS Tanner if they can keep kissing in secret? Perfection. So yeah, this is buttering you up a bit, but man I love what you've done with this story so far. And if Tanner has to lose (and he probably does, that "dead wife" comment is a real heel turn, even for an already established villain,) I hope it doesn't happen for a long, LONG (hard) time. And if I could possibly offer one teeny suggestion? I think the sacred circle needs to learn the power of sexing themselves up, wearing more revealing clothes. In public. But that's just a suggestion. I LOVE this story.

10/14/21, 1:46 PM
@SillyBoyz Hey, thanks man, I really appreciate it. I couldn't have written the next chapter without encouragement. Here's hoping it doesn't disappoint!
Anonymous
10/14/21, 12:53 PM
another great chapter, this makes me so horny. can't wait for more!!!