Recent Comments

10/8/21, 11:16 PM
Werewolf! I love the idea of them not being able to leave.
10/8/21, 11:08 PM
As you know I respect this story and loved it so far. That said, this chapter of jumping back and forth was confusing. I have a slight clue of what's going on (Charlie the dog is Charles the douchebag?) So many first person narratives. I'm glad other readers understood and enjoyed.
10/8/21, 11:04 PM
👏Bring👏on👏the👏sex👏demons👏
10/8/21, 5:54 PM
I'm against the end because it comes from nowhere. Also have someone who has a good grasp of grammar and spelling read it first before posting from now on.

10/8/21, 7:38 PM
Sorry you did not like the ending. I am having a friend spell check and grammer check me from now on. @Astradei

10/8/21, 10:33 PM
@Alpha Artemis It might be a little bit meta? But for people who know these public artist figures, the ending makes perfect sense. If you have to explain the joke, it ruins it.
leonardoPT
10/8/21, 9:53 PM
That is good to hear, thank you. I look forward to a possible story :)
10/8/21, 9:50 PM
Great bubblebutt!
10/8/21, 9:13 PM
hell yeah give me the sex demons. I want to see some creative demon rituals and contracts :)))
leonardoPT
8/30/21, 10:34 PM
Great story Drake. I still was hopen that we might see the neighbour boy back in the picture. I guess he is there somewhere but you are sooo discreet, lol

9/1/21, 3:41 AM
@leonardoPT Ha ha! Not sure what you mean by discreet. I do what I can to make decent stories. Sometimes I leave characters open for future stories. Who knows but right now I am working on a commission.

leonardoPT
9/1/21, 11:18 AM
@Drake Nightstorm I was taunting a bit. And I was suggesting that just because of discretion and prudery you left the boy out of the story. But it is precisely your lack of it that I appreciate. Keep up the good work please

9/8/21, 12:32 PM
@leonardoPT Oh gosh! Nathan! I totally forgot I mentioned him at all! I guess in my mind he wasn't really there only in the imagination of Carter. My attempt at a boy just envisioning someone similar to his brother who he had a secret crush on.

leonardoPT
9/8/21, 4:35 PM
@Drake Nightstorm Well he is not lost for eternity. You sure will find a suitable place for him, and I will enjoy that !

10/8/21, 7:00 PM
@leonardoPT I will have to think of a story for him to be in but your right! Thank you for the support!
felix
10/8/21, 6:59 PM
This is an older story now, but I like to come back to it every now and then :) the pleasure of the transformation and the self-obsession were a nice touch that really made this a hot read
10/5/21, 6:17 AM
While I greatly enjoyed the haircut element of this story, I must also admit that it's *terrifying.* There's no supernatural hypnosis or magic spells here: just the United States military specifically targeting people and brainwashing them with propaganda and the promise of sex and adventure. And it turns Gilbert into a muscled-up clone of all the other Marines...It's always frightening to see stories that aren't fantasy on here.