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Sep 28, 2021
9/29/21, 7:03 PM
Phenomenal ideas here! Both the Peach'd drug and the skip-ads-grants-immersive-experience bit. I echo time.to.occur's comment that it's nice to see you bust out a short, hot one-off story that's light on worldbuilding and heavy on hotness. One bit of subjective, constructive criticism: Call me biased (because I skew bottom myself), but I really wanted to know what it felt like to get fucked with a Peach'd ass, and what we got was mostly the protagonist listening to what the top said it felt like to fuck a Peach'd ass. The effect kind of kept me at arm's length from the action, which is odd when you consider it's written in the first person and should have been more immersive as a result.

9/30/21, 3:02 AM
Thanks! I tried to do something semi-experimental where the MC's experience is partially illustrated by viewer comments (that help fill in some of the blanks where the narrator is too blissed out to explain what's happening). Maybe a more traditional framing would have been more immersive, but I like to push narrative convention when I think it potentially adds to the story! @Noam de Pluma

9/30/21, 3:58 PM
@bluesuedewho Oh, no, the user comments were a fantastic touch! I meant to compliment you on that in my initial comment but got distracted by, ugh, *work*. I just meant the sex itself seemed to forget the protagonist's sensory experience of getting fucked in favor of what the top said it felt like to top him. You did great with his experience of wanting to get fucked, and the transformation happening, and the oral for that matter. This really is a nitpick about me wanting to dwell on what he felt like having a dick up his Peach'd ass.
9/30/21, 3:52 PM
Oh man, what a great first chapter. I may or may not have cum on my face...lol. Loved the pictures as well - can't wait to get more from this manager.
Anonymous
9/30/21, 3:41 PM
hot story and love the links to the pictures... really brings it all alive...
9/30/21, 3:34 PM
Incredibly hot! The mental changes are my favorite part, and I love how we get two kinds (musical hypnosis and direct mind control). The pictures only accentuate it, although I'm not into daddies. :p But to each their own! Great story, Hypnothrill!
Anonymous
9/30/21, 11:30 AM
Woof! Charles was quite the dog, wasnt he. Going in raw like that, he sure deserved what he got.

9/30/21, 12:06 PM
Can't keep treating everyone as if they're beneath you without expecting someone at some point to snatch the lead away from you. But do you think he's really learned his lesson?

9/30/21, 12:06 PM
Can't keep treating everyone as if they're beneath you without expecting someone at some point to snatch the lead away from you. But do you think he's really learned his lesson?

Anonymous
9/30/21, 2:15 PM
@HunkLover Honestly, with how Charlie acted towards Brett, Id say he still has some ways to
9/30/21, 12:11 PM
What next!? Is he dead? What's going to happen now??? So many questions. Can't wait for the next part.

9/30/21, 2:11 PM
@Jonanator All will be answered! Stay tuned, and thanks for your continued support!
9/30/21, 12:36 PM
nice story. can't wait for more.
9/30/21, 12:16 PM
the plot is thikening, lets how it goes from now on
9/29/21, 10:27 PM
I loved the way you told the story in this chapter, alternating between the present and Charlie's past. Is there more to come?

9/30/21, 10:04 AM
@Hypnoguy67 Oh, we're not quite done yet! To be honest, I wondered jumping between time periods might be confusing for the audience, but I guess and I hope it wasn't! I'm happy you liked it.

9/30/21, 12:14 PM
Looking forward to more, @HunkLover. Thanks for writing such a great story.
9/30/21, 11:10 AM
This story is sooooo hot! Thank you so much for it! Please continue soon! I vote for option 1.