Recent Comments

9/11/21, 4:29 PM
Very nice chapter, some little faults here and there but nothing dramatic. I feel the same thing as with some of the previous story: In a monarchy, especially how Jae was portrayer in the first story, people shouldn't have nearly have as much power to talk back as they seems to think they do in this series. How could father Martin take Colt if he is locked up? Also, isn't Colt the younger brother of Zane? I'm a bit confused by that threat. Why is he bringing him up when talking with the emperor rather than with Zane ("you come, or I take your brother" would make more sense, if I remember correctly). On the other hand, If Colt if of the royal family, why would he be let anywhere near a guy they want to arrest? How could Martin get to him? The reaction of the parent was sadly believable, on the other hand. Hard conservative families believe what they want... And I still have some issue with the constant power unbalance. I repeat, but if one character has no choice but to leave with another, it creates a dynamic that is only worsened by the class difference. And the Morningstar are really starting to accept only people who have no choice but to stay with them or going back to their abusers... I do think the main couple is cute, i just would appreciate it better if it didn't feel like Zane accepted to marry a guy he known for a few days because he can't go back to his family. It feels more pragmatic or desperate than romantic.

9/11/21, 4:37 PM
@BobbyBlobfish thanks for the comments. I was trying to portray it as a bluff, Father Martin actually wouldn't do anything to Colt. He was trying to force the hand of the Mornignstar family to give him up, by taking one of there own. As for the power balance, I'm still trying to work with that more. Also, on the part of Jae having this absolute power, I'll address that too, because, he actually doesn't, but I don't think I ever touched on that, so thanks for reminding me on that. I can see how that is confusing. I'll take your suggestions and apply them to the next chapter.

9/14/21, 5:04 PM
@Jonanator Hum, okay. That explain a lot. Thanks for the explanation. It's always complicated to deal with power balances when there is something that clearly push in a favor of one character. Oh that Jae doesn't full power, okay. Really was not easy to see with him kicking a minister and generally doing a bit like he wants. Clarifications would be nice, indeed.

9/14/21, 6:09 PM
@BobbyBlobfish yeah, I'll touch on that in the next chapter. I'll post it in a bit
9/14/21, 4:09 PM
@Sunshineboi very good for your first story!

9/14/21, 4:31 PM
@MasterJ Thank you! It's not exactly my first story, but certainly my first attempt at something that's at least 75% porn.
Baple
9/14/21, 2:32 AM
Oh god to be in Samuel's position

9/14/21, 4:21 AM
@Baple My personal favourite. I think the utter obliteration of dignity is a big kink of mine.

Baple
9/14/21, 4:40 AM
@SunshineBoi I agree. It's always hot to see someone stuck up getting broken down to nothing and subjected to the most humiliating things possible.

9/14/21, 4:46 AM
@Baple Definitely a theme I hope to explore further...Complete with big, gassy asses.

Baple
9/14/21, 4:54 AM
@SunshineBoi I can't wait to sniff...I mean read them with it comes

9/14/21, 1:29 PM
@Baple I'll make sure you envy the next victim even more.

Anonymous
9/14/21, 4:05 PM
@SunshineBoi looking forward too it :3

Baple
9/14/21, 4:08 PM
@SunshineBoi cant wait for it~
9/14/21, 1:09 AM
Can't wait to seem more. looking forward to it.

9/14/21, 9:49 AM
@Jonanator Fingers crossed you like what's coming!

9/14/21, 11:23 AM
@HunkLover oh, I will
9/14/21, 10:06 AM
Normally I don't comment, but I just have to say I love Chaz's transformation! Already read this story 6 times and came every time reading it. Really curious what's gonna happen to him, and the others, in the next chapters. Also love your other stories!

9/14/21, 10:11 AM
@JTransform Wow. Well I really value your comment! It's great to get feedback from anyone who reads our work, whether they like the story or not; but I think I can tell you've enjoyed what you've read so far! We're in the process of ironing out the future chapters, so I hope you enjoy where we take it! Thanks for commenting.
Jack
9/14/21, 12:56 AM
This is ... shockingly sweet. I'm very excited to read more of this!

9/14/21, 9:49 AM
Thanks @Jack! With 'The Devil By My Side' allowing me to explore my darker more complex side, I thought I'd just try to tell a sweet, simple story... I hope you enjoy it!
Apr 19, 2010
9/14/21, 9:00 AM
the moms death was unnecessary and a bit of a turn off. it was hot at first but then it happened. i. sure other people will still like it. just not for me.
Apr 19, 2010
9/14/21, 8:58 AM
the moms death was unecessary and a bit of a turn off. it was hot at first but then it happened. i. sure other people will still like it. just not for
Anonymous
9/14/21, 8:56 AM
those titties need to be milked!
9/14/21, 8:32 AM
I eagerly await the next part(s).