I was pleasantly surprised to see an update for this particular story (how you're writing three different complex stories at once is amazing to me). Very nice update. Hot with a great building of suspense. I'm curious if there is a statuette for each of the "ghosts" (I put that in quotes because I'm not convinced they *are* ghosts) and if we'll see them. In any case, I'm excited that they are going back to the house already and seeing how Alan might be affected by the ghosts. I hope he continues to become less of a bully and/or softer around the edges.

... What? Guess I needed to wait this chapter. Your chapters 2, pffffieewwww. They tend to introduce a shit ton of stuff to open. 1) Putting mind control, given the fact this site is still a spin-off of a mind-control porn site, is interesting. Not sure how we are supposed to take it. Probably more horrifying than some will take it (I read things on GSS or Tumblr. I don't think you wanna know). But, okay. You continue to show a lot more ideas that seems better thought-out than in "The prince and I", which was suffering, as stated before, of questionable stuff that led nowhere and things that came out too late. Here, the hypnosis could have come out in the first chapter if he received messages from his parents (should have, probably, even.) but it's nicely done. It seems in character (except the whore part. I hope this get explained. Maybe simply sold to women.). 2) But I must confess with the beginning of the chapter, what I'm used to read, I was expecting Ahmed to brainwash Zane. Maybe he'll take advantage, maybe not. Your story is your own, and my curiosity was sting (French expression. I'm interested.) on what the brainwash element add to the mix. 3) However, as soon as I read "Father's good slut", I almost facepalm. I wasn't there to comment during the writing of the previous part and so you didn't have a block of text about questionable tropes to hold with precaution. But, WHY IS THIS THE THIRD STORY WITH THE ROYAL LEAD SAVING THE COMMONER FROM A SEX-RELATED SITUATION??? I don't read a lot of Harlequin and co, but is this a massive tropes? A relationship can be build without a partner needing to get away from his home and being near-dependent on the other. Especially when the one who is taking care of the other has a much higher position. This is filled with power unbalance. Also, we are definitively reaching sex assault and abuse as a tool for easy drama. =(=(=(=(=(= 4) Also, something I didn't comment on for a while. Your writing. It's getting better, slowly but surely. The phrase are better built, there is a style that his starting to be defined, I notice less errors, and they are much more minors. The only issue still present is how fast everything happen, but you seems to be interested in short chapters so I can get over it (and I don't like long stories, so I'm not complaining). =)=)=)=)=)=)=)=)=

hot story hope there are alot more chapters

Oh, I like the idea. The "commoner meet royalty" is really cliché and your at your third story, but this is not the most common set-up for the role. The relationship... i would say Zane changes his mind fast, but it's not too distracting for now. I do say THANK YOU, this feels a lot less like a "love at first sight" situation than the previous one. For Jae and Kai, there was a previous relationship, but Kai wanted him without having met and Jae had a love than went from 5-10 to 90 in a rape save. Austin and Cole it was hard to buy. Here, there is attraction, but it's not love yet. (or I should read chapter 2 first and it's gonna be speed).

Another great chapter. You keep surprising me. I just love how reasonable you make all Tanner's ideas seem. Of course, they are all gonna consider it normal to kiss each other. That makes total sense, at least when Tanner explains it :-) My only nitpick is what seems to be the beginning of the pastor's sexualized feelings towards his son. It seems weird that his cock would react when he kissed his son. 1: I don't think the pastor would think of his penis as a "cock". 2: I would have thought that Tanner would play a much more active role in changing the pastor's thoughts and feelings towards his son and the other young men. As I read this chapter Tanner only really pushed the idea that the guys had all thought about kissing a guy. The pastor's cock reacting to his son and him slowly starting to admire his son's body seems to be all on his own accord. Are we supposed to think that the pastor already had some lingering thoughts about his son that Tanner is only taking advantage of? But none the less I am really looking forward to the next chapter. I guess it will soon be time for the pastor's "normal" jerk-off session if he now believes that he does it twice a day.

hot. cant wait for more.

I think chapter 7 was the weakest, because the romantic misunderstanding is such an used trope and it made no sense that Cole would be betraying the royal family given his past, but it was dealt with quickly. This was a bit of a mess, with perhaps the worst issues being the number of things that came out of nowhere (the tapes, the uncle, the false name...) or were useless overall (Mark dating Vincent, the gratuitous rapes (Cole simply being tortures would have had the same effect), the bigotry of the parents witch was such a weak motivations it might have been better they have none). BUT, the main couple was likable, there were plenty of good ideas that just didn't have time to breathe, a bit more character development than in "The emperor and I"... I liked reading the story. I just felt it could have been handled better.

Tanner is quite aggressive sometimes,but I guess he needs to be if he wants his group to work out I have some suspicions about who Tanner is exactly,but I'll wait and see. the plot thickens

Love it so far. Though it seems Tanner uses his power obviously on Pastor Pete but feels different with the boys

... Lot to unpack here. Where to start... 1) The timeline almost came out confusing. After two years, people would probably have moved out a lot from a toxic friendship? The relationship fine there are still some issues, but mark always came out of nowhere 3-4 chapters in, so the friendship always seemed more weak that she was supposed to be. And I thought rather than two years prior the break-up happened a few mouth earlier the way it was written, with a red-con, not sure why. The first line were weirdly worded. So, it's not bad... but it's a bit confusing. 2) The BIG problem is the level of abuse the parents are doing. That some people do that in real life, probably a few, humans can be very twisted. No problem buying it, even if it makes me feel sick. That one can write this, absolutely. I think anything can be talked about if it's written with enough consideration. The problem is the execution, not the idea. The parents don't come off as really dangerous people. They come off as cartoon villains with twirling mustaches. NOBODY would be that violent or say things like that in somebody else's home, or they are really sure of themselves and how untouchable they are. But here, they barely have any power, so no. they just look dumb and the reader has an hard time believing they haven't been caught until then. 3) Didn't Vincent want Cole for sex only? Why now Vincent didn't want to have sex with him? I'm confused. Also, nothing in the previous chapter implied the parents didn't know and that they show the video to Vincent imply that they did know and wanted the relationship to break or something. 4) After the rape attempt of the emperor and I, abusive parents in this story make it looks like you are using sexual assault as a prop to fasten love between the main characters, which is filled with unfortunate implications. 5) Oh yes, with that level of violence, it's VERY unlikely only one doctor noticed. And that he threatened to report, probably wasn't intended that way, seems to state that this other doctor didn't care but simply wanted the dad gone from the hospital for a reason or another. And it could have been handled better. For example, the dad could have been reported and go to the kingdom as a way to avoid justice. Sure, it would have been a bit stupid for the kingdom to not make a background check on the new hospital administrator, but I think they would have found red flags if they did some research on him even with the current situation. So, I might not be the best to talk about this. But, the ideas of the chapter are all really interesting and could be the focuses of full novels, but your writing style (who tends to go fast with concepts and relationships, for better and for worse) and the details we are given make the situation looks just here for shock value with no thoughts put into it, and it's really not a good look when one put assault in their stories.