Recent Comments

9/7/21, 11:45 PM
I'm glad that you were able to turn your fantasy into a story to share. Having seen you post about your original idea, I think this turned out quite well. I hope you continue to develop your writing. As for your English skills, they are quite good. More than good enough to convey erotic ideas, so no need to hold back. I think a lot of people have wondered where the stories of dominant bottoms are - they are few and far between.
9/6/21, 3:07 PM
I also love the slow burn here. My one niggling critique is that the story is generally so well-written and immersive that a few implausible details stuck out like a sore thumb to me. The socioeconomic and racial diversity of the boys in the congregation challenged my suspension of disbelief, and then the description of Tanner's lime-green suit and raspberry shirt as "subtle" made me laugh out loud.

9/6/21, 10:36 PM
@Hypnothrill a good point on the lime: a moment of fruit dyslexia. I meant olive, and will edit thereto!

9/7/21, 11:27 PM
@Hypnothrill I agree with a lot of what you're saying, but when I was young I was a church goer, and perhaps it was the area in which I lived in, but in my own experience the congregation was diverse as this. I can actually picture the people in this story pretty accurately just off my own account.
Anonymous
9/7/21, 10:32 PM
Cum on is that all you got! Think of all the other things Rick still hasn't done yet. There's so much more to be done ! So many more to corrupt ! Now get back to work & write more chapters. Go be productive ! GO !
LthrTrooper
9/7/21, 8:37 PM
Lthr_jock, I am loving this story. Also love Transformation of a Top, though I do wish you had written more than just 2 pieces of the story. I Hope there will be more written soon. Until then I will enjoy this story
9/7/21, 7:45 PM
I was thinking about WHY where the parents not arrested immediately, but okay, this is credible, except how rushed the trial is, but I don't think anyone will complain. Mark and Vincent ended up not meaning a lot , until now. I do enjoy the fact that Cole has separation anxiety. A slight issue I had with this franchise from the get-go was how little the characters seemed affected. This is a slight touche but it helps so much.

9/7/21, 8:37 PM
@BobbyBlobfish Thanks for the comment. it's very helpful.
9/7/21, 6:13 PM
Hot chapter. Hope more is to come.
9/7/21, 6:06 PM
I love this story. please tell me there is more in the works.
9/7/21, 2:04 PM
Thank you, guys. I think I tend to go to a more elusive description, either they got this point or even physical description of the characters. Perhaps I write a prequel about the stud's conditioning at the Camp…

Ysuran
9/7/21, 6:04 PM
that i would love to read @topdog
9/7/21, 4:36 PM
I want to see the brother
9/7/21, 3:31 PM
ahhhhh been so long i love it heeheeh looking forwarf how this goes on from here