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9/7/21, 11:42 AM
Okay, bobby, you can do this, second story! And I have the feeling the writing had a step down? hear instead of here, some i, "hos name", interest in e"... (May I recommend getting a beta reader, at least for now? When I had a lot of issues writing in English, that's what I did) The relationship is more solid this time around, on the other hand. The fact it comes out so fast despite both characters wanting to know each other is a bit weird, but it can be used in plenty of ways. I think the biggest problem here, I didn't comment on it in the last chapters of the emperor and I, is that Marc seems to have done a 180 in term of characterization. He went from apparently genuine friend to self-destructive asshole without much build up. I don't know, it feel like you changed plans about him as you were writing. A lot of people do that, subplots are definitively subject to changes. It just comes off really badly because now it went from side story to part of the overall plot.

9/7/21, 11:47 AM
@BobbyBlobfish Yeah, as I said, this story did not um, turn out good, which is why I kind ended it early. I'm going to circle back to it at a later time, and try to redo it, after I get a good thought process with it. A lot of things were happening at the time, that, this one just slipped away from me. I probably will be posting a new chapter for the new story I'm working on, so, there's hope with that one, hopefully. Thanks again for the comment. I'll use them to help me refix this one.
9/6/21, 7:45 PM
Here I am again with a comment. So. 1) the writing is getting better! We have some incredible things (This chapter, half instead of have, a previous one had a = inside a word), but besides that, it's more fluid, the phrases are more English-sounding. The characters are starting to develop and the reactions are more natural, even if a bit rushed at times. 2) I do enjoy a lot more the main relationship. I still think some things are rushed over (trauma over almost being raped, where? It's a week later! with the first blow job even less.) but the couple is kind of cute. Having some scenes of honeymoon would have been wonderful to give them an identity outside of each other. I can't remember an hobby for either. (but given the fact this story is finished, take that as tips for your next ones). 3) As soon as Ian showed up, I though of Chloe from miraculous. For better and for worst (if you don't follow, she is very controversial in the fandom). Interesting. The side characters seem like they are real people, at least most of them. The ideas are starting to be more unique.

9/6/21, 8:12 PM
@BobbyBlobfish Thanks again for the comment. I like this story in the series and maybe the third that I'm working on more then the second one. I might redo that one in the future. I'll take your comments into account, and use them :)

9/7/21, 9:46 AM
@Jonanator Well, we all our preferences in what we wrote. I remember my first series on GSS, I kind of let it down unfinished, but I came back almost a year later to correct every errors I made. Re-doing the story is something some people do, can be very interesting to see how much your writing style changed. Happy that my comments are helping. They are critical, but I think there is a good story here, or I wouldn't be commenting.

9/7/21, 11:37 AM
@BobbyBlobfish Thanks for that, I really welcome it.
9/7/21, 11:03 AM
An obedient stud is always the best
9/7/21, 8:57 AM
What a great idea for a story!
9/7/21, 7:36 AM
OMG! Yes you're back. Thank you for a new chapter for this amazing series!
Thomas97
9/7/21, 6:49 AM
great story, but would like to read something about his creation :D
slavethruhypno@yahoo.com
9/4/21, 4:39 PM
Oh fuck! This is getting better. Have often wanted to be a cow -- or at least what I fantasized a man-cow was. Hopefully, I can now learn what one really is.

Yourguy92
9/4/21, 9:02 PM
@slavethruhypno@yahoo.com what would it be like for you?

9/4/21, 9:35 PM
@Yourguy92 It is just a fantasy of mine, so I don't know for sure. But, I would be trained not to think. No real thought at all. I would be in a cow stall, kept there. Living there. Fed there. Cared and washed there. The food would be the type that encourages milk (semen) production. I would wear a cow bell. Trained to mew and moo like a cow when I needed to be milked. Twice a day, morning and evening, I would mew loudly and then be led to the milking machine for the extraction of my milk. A milk bucket would be attached to my balls, pulling them down and hanging between my spread legs. The dairyman would have a viagra pill in palm of his hand and I would lap it up with just my tongue and lips. Once my dick got large from the viagra, the pulser would be attached to my dick. The pulser would be clear so the dairyman and anyone else watching could see my milk flowing from my dick into the milk bucket, which would also be clear. A vibrating plug would be put in my ass and turned on to stimulate my prostate. Outside of gentle mewing, I would not react at all. Being milked would not feel like an orgasm, but like the milk is simply flowing out because my prostate is being stimulated. Anyone who has had their prostate massaged causing semen to be released knows this feeling. When I was no longer had any milk, all of the equipment would be removed and I would be led back to my stall, until I mewed again, indicating I was ready to be milked again. The twice a day milking would become a habit, almost an instinct for me, so that I was trained to provide milk twice each day. The other part of this is milking my nipples. While unusual, there are many documented cases of males having their breast and nipples trained to lactate like a woman. Not as much milk as a woman, but enough. And it takes a long time to train the lactation glands in a male until they produce breast milk. I don't know much about how this is done, but I would be eager to learn so hat my nipples could also be milked.

Yourguy92
9/7/21, 5:49 AM
@slavethruhypno very interesting scenario. I didn't know that male could lactate..
5/6/20, 5:22 PM
Thank you! This is the first storyline I am submitting, so all encouraging reviews are appreciated!

9/7/21, 3:15 AM
keep up the good work! its my favorite type of writing! oblivious, detailed and paced ! @Letstrythis
9/6/21, 4:36 PM
Really hot story, but is that the right image link? The one you included went to a photo of a man in the shower, not three men on a couch.

9/7/21, 2:11 AM
@Hypnothrill I corrected the pic. Thanks for catching the error.
9/7/21, 12:29 AM
Awesome story! Loved the cursing and the pastor's reaction to it. Hope we see him become even more fucking corrupted.