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9/7/21, 12:29 AM
Awesome story! Loved the cursing and the pastor's reaction to it. Hope we see him become even more fucking corrupted.
9/6/21, 8:47 PM
Aww I really hope we see more Melvin in future!

9/6/21, 11:44 PM
Hi, @Trotskisaurus! I've been thinking on bring back some of the characters from previous chapters and Melvin is a strong contender to return. I'm glad to see you like him! I have one idea involving Melvin that the more I think about on, the best it sounds.
Anonymous
9/6/21, 7:39 AM
you

9/6/21, 10:28 PM
Me!
9/4/21, 11:50 PM
Very sexy. Very erotic. As if the little kid from the twilight zone episode who could warp reality grew up to be a hot blonde guy. It's a really interesting kind of mind control, that the narrator just can't stop thinking about Frank as if Frank's reality is just overwriting everything for him. It's not even clear if Frank is deliberately messing with his head or if Frank's godly intense reality is simply infecting his brain. The sex is good too. It's a really good description of a straight person being overwhelmed both by pleasure and by the intensity of this bigger than human personality.

9/6/21, 8:41 PM
@Nocturne13 Thanks for your very kind comments!
9/6/21, 1:14 AM
Seems hot, but I wish you could separate each new speaker in its own paragraph so that it's easier to read

9/6/21, 8:41 PM
@Zi19 thanks for the feedback - I didn't realise it looked like that, so I've found how to edit the lines and re-done it!
9/6/21, 8:22 PM
the end line is brilliant
9/6/21, 8:15 PM
Loving this series so far! Incredibly excited to see more.
9/6/21, 6:36 PM
Haven't been on GCS in a while, and I see there is plenty of stories I have to catch up on, so i will comment only every few chapters. Compared to the first two chapters, I think there is a bit more work on grammar and writing? Might be me, but I definitively I'm less re-reading to understand what I'm seeing. There are still some " missing here and there, and the time tense seems a bit messy at time. But It's mostly the way the phrases are written that sometimes comes at odd. Nothing drastic. I really enjoy the ideas. The best friend who is ready to protect his friend against an emperor, politic intrigues, a side coupe... It just comes out WAY too fast. The main relationship especially is growing too fast for me. Seems more based on sex than feelings for now, and I'm not sure if it's supposed to come out that way. Kai barely seems to be acclimating to being in the palace.

9/6/21, 6:42 PM
@BobbyBlobfish hey, thanks for the comment. Yeah, still fairly new at this, I'm trying to get the hang of it, and put things together well. The comment helps though. It gives me a chance to improve though. I'm going to try and post another chapter to my new story this week, but, I'm right now, a wreck and kinda injured from a family brawl yesterday..... that...and I'm giving a lot of time to me Daddy. He makes me so happy :)
9/6/21, 1:33 PM
lets see how the father change, why not a power bottom?
Alex
9/6/21, 1:05 PM
This was really hot. would like to see another part and see it unfold.