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9/4/21, 9:27 AM
There are some very hot scenes here, but I would have enjoyed this chapter a lot more without the explicit descriptions of the women being brutally murdered.

9/4/21, 10:28 AM
@Hypnothrill agreed

9/5/21, 12:09 AM
I'm curious how would you write the scene? How would you write the berserk Pyre Bruins attack on the police officer's. I have much to learn telling stories so any writing suggestion is always welcome.@Hypnothrill

9/5/21, 4:25 AM
@Big-Zargo 12 I don't think you needed to kill the women off, which to me kills the erotic mood. One option, of course, would be to set the chapter in an all-male police station. But you also have the device of the Pyre Bruins' transformative cum. Why couldn't that land on one of the female officers and transform her into a male Pyre Bruin?

9/5/21, 11:13 PM
@Hypnothrill . MMM.... I'll keep that in mind in the future about death being a mood killer. To be honest with you I didn't think that an all-male police station were actually thing. Don't get me wrong I knew they were some in the olden times. There is a reason why the Fire Titan did not allow the female officers to become Pyre Bruins. I won't say more about the fire Titan motivations,that would be spoilers.
9/5/21, 11:11 PM
I can tell this is going to be awesome. Next chapter can't come fast enough
9/5/21, 10:28 PM
This was phenomenal! made me so fucking hard. Wish there was more !
9/5/21, 9:04 PM
would love to see a part 3
9/5/21, 6:35 PM
I am loving this! I always enjoy a good reprogramming scene where they are unable to resist, but still realize what's been done. I'm also, not usually into sissy stuff, but this is amazing!
9/5/21, 6:18 PM
I like the new chapter although felt Alan should have known or been more suspicious of Rob. His pin should have gone off or something should have been off by Rob's behavior. Just a minor gripe but I hope the next chapter is awesome hope Alan gets pulled into the mix more so.
9/5/21, 4:58 PM
Basic idea of the alluring romantic stranger So SO SOOOOO well executed. The build up in the mind, the changes, the implications the explicit actions. THANK YOU
boy Jason
9/5/21, 3:48 PM
I love how this story is coming along. Can't wait until we meet Ricki in all his glory. I will admit I was hoping Amir might make Rick into a boyfriend for Danni, wearing dress clothes, like button down shirts, dress shoes/pants, and bowties (since he will still be Amir's boy)
9/5/21, 2:58 PM
I love this story. please do more to it. It is hot.
9/5/21, 2:38 PM
hot. can't wait for more.