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Chips
8/28/21, 2:45 PM
Well what can I say that hasn't already been said you just know how to put a story together very well written It's good to Jax keeping his Dominant role and Ronnie is struggling a little bit sometimes with his Dominant side but now Jax has got his mind on other things such as 3D what will he do will he meet up with 3D and his mates and what will Ronnie think of It all as he wants to take Jax's cherry and he will want to go bare back to feel connected I love how they both work things out to but what has Sabrina got in her mind to turn up, you have got to carry on with this great erotic hypnotic story I might be turning a bit myself Ha Ha not sure which way yet great story Brain will be looking forward to the next erotic chapter. All the best very enjoyable reading how's patty get on in your other stories they are all great stories
8/27/21, 8:44 PM
the way how this story has a strangle hold on my cock and orgasms... I love it so much!

8/28/21, 2:03 PM
Thanks! What a compliment! @Thexshxboi
8/28/21, 12:41 PM
I liked this story a lot, even if I didn't feel the mind control in it. Please keep on writing stories and publish them.
8/28/21, 11:40 AM
Glad you give them credit. I see you're going to *milk* us by posting in piecemeal.

Yourguy92
8/28/21, 12:31 PM
@astrologus absolutely but I won't make you wait too long, promised.
8/28/21, 11:09 AM
This is exceptionally promising and what I've been waiting for.

Yourguy92
8/28/21, 11:23 AM
@astrologus I just love that story and wanted to read it again but couldn't find it here. I think this story deserves to be stored here and I hope if white collar finds it, he appreciates my urge to share it here.
8/28/21, 10:56 AM
lovely story
nycboot
8/27/21, 1:58 PM
Wow wonderful story. The first reading was (for me) pure j/o arousal which worked splendidly. Then I read it again to savor the good parts. Once cleared of the fog of arousal, I got to see how extremely well you wrote the story. Every character has a deep motivation (even if it's been altered). The third time around I was really taken with Peter's confessions - that just continues the arousal. As far as the comment on the long exposition, yeah, I can see that when I first read it. But going through it again (and again), the exposition doesn't seem long at all. It all forms a wonderful ever-rising arc. A good story has to have a good set-up which results in making the main action all the more potent. I would leave it as it. (Some of Hitchcock films are criticized for long expositions - but once you actually listen to the dialogue and see the visuals, you see that the expositions connect more tightly with the later actions and events. I would posit the same is operating in this story.) So bravo for an excellent story!

8/28/21, 8:57 AM
@nycboot Thank you for your wonderful feedback. Hearing that you've liked my work enough to reread it multiple times is some of the best praise i could possibly ask for. Knowing which parts resonated with you both thrill me as a creator and show me what works well and what to consider using again. Your words bring me such joy, so thank you so much for taking the time to write them.
Aug 27, 2021
8/28/21, 4:05 AM
Hot, sexy story with a lot of group sex...my kind of story! Excellent writing...you felt like you were there in the shed with all the guys (wish I was). The hairy boss sounded super sexy, the character descriptions were great and the sex scenes had me hard an leaking the hole time. Keep up the great and write more!

8/28/21, 8:24 AM
@MuscleSon69 Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it!
Horny
8/28/21, 5:58 AM
oh i was kinda hoping for a happy ending for Lee, imo its never really fun when the tormentor gets away scott free with their acts. this was still a fun story though, thanks for your work!
Aug 26, 2021
EJG
8/28/21, 5:26 AM
Hot. Just fantasising he becomes the office slut