Recent Comments

8/25/21, 8:26 PM
Well dang! This chapter is even hotter than the last one! Like the other commenters have said, the twist on dumbing down is great. I like that it was almost like Tyzon's dick knew that Charley was thinking of a big word that it throbbed. Very nice touch. The one thing I was a little confused about was if Tyzon was making his cock bigger or if it was just him adjusting Charley's perception of it. Maybe it was both. Either way, this is by no means a complaint. Simply a musing on my part.
8/25/21, 8:10 PM
I came here on the suggestion of Nutiper and I'm really enjoying this this story. It took me a few chapters to really get into it, but the muscle worship on this is what made me decide to comment. I love the subtlety of the mental transformation and just how playful it is. Well done!
Anonymous
8/25/21, 6:50 PM
Very good, fun read. Would absolutely love a sequel/prequel.
Jim
8/25/21, 6:44 PM
woof! very hot big bro :)
Redpen88
8/25/21, 5:42 PM
Always a fan of this archetype. This shows good promise for the category and style. can't wait for the next chapter!
8/25/21, 5:30 PM
Love this series man. I hope we find out about Billy and Gavin's fate (and maybe Bruce and Chuck too if they weren't part of the larger group already taken care of).
Good Barkley
8/25/21, 2:56 PM
I loved the start to this story. then how it progressed. I was wondering if I would love to be Barkley, for a short time, so free of all worries and so eager to Play. so all in All, I loved it, so thanks
8/25/21, 2:34 PM
Brilliant story really enjoyed it like I do all of yours . Gotta agree with Math_Reez would be good to have a second part with a before and after .
8/25/21, 12:50 PM
Hot but it honestly still needs a lot of work in the editing phase
8/25/21, 7:03 AM
I like how mindfucked everybody is at this point: José talking about himself as "enamorada” (a form to say a lady is in love in Spanish); Nate acting so macho after power bottoming with his friend; but my favorite had to be Cody being such a rampant slut who's happy to debase himself and allows other men to ridicule him in exchange of sex. Above all, he seems so proud to tell everyone knows what his father and him does behind closed doors. He is undoubtedly the best mindfuck in the story (that's saying a lot! , especially compared of how he used to be. Oh, man, you have no idea how happy you make me with every new chapter.

Oddballs
8/25/21, 8:18 AM
@Plymouth58 Weeeeeell, if I'm being honest, I get all of my Spanish lines from Google Translate; I wanted to make Jose be as authentic as I could, so I typed up the sentences in English and translated it to Spanish and copy/pasted the translation. The only language I've tried to learn was 2 years of Japanese in high school, and hell if I remember most of it, if any at all. So the part of Jose referring to himself with a female pronoun is a dumb mess up on MY part >_>

8/25/21, 11:13 AM
@Oddballs oh, really? ha, ha, I thought it was intentional! you see, in Spanish, many words have a masculine or feminine form depending on the subject on the sentence, and recently Google Translate has been offering translations in feminine as the first option (in an effort to be more inclusive, I suppose), and while it sometimes includes both forms, it doesn't always do so, or it's not very clear about it nor how to use it. You can get a better translation if you specify who is the subject in the sentence, writing it like "I'm in love, he said", so it will give you the right gender, like "estoy enamorado, él dijo". But if you have some doubt about words in Spanish, I'd be happy to help you. I'm checking the site from time to time, so it won't take me long to reply 🙂