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Anonymous
8/19/21, 10:09 PM
excellent work

8/20/21, 9:36 AM
Thank you 😊
8/20/21, 8:45 AM
This is your first story? Amazing job. A nice, classic hypnotist story. You definitely have a way with words.
8/20/21, 7:10 AM
the photos to this story no longer exist which is disappointing.....that & the fact that i don't have tumblr.....any other way to c the photos?
8/20/21, 4:14 AM
Nice story so far, hope more is to come. I do have a question though, who does Dave really want, and who does he rally love out of all these guys. Will you touch on that in the coming chapters.
8/19/21, 9:47 PM
It's funny: although this chapter was in fact longer than the first one, I felt it shorter ha, ha! oh, my, what a cliffhanger! I'm dying to know what happens next!

8/20/21, 12:39 AM
@Plymouth58 I love a good cliffhanger haha! I'll have the next part out soon!

8/20/21, 4:10 AM
@jockslut I can't wait!
8/17/21, 4:00 AM
I was willing to get past the awkward writing, but racial slurs are such a boner killer...

Anonymous
8/17/21, 6:29 PM
@hapaga5899 What racial slurs?

Anonymous
8/19/21, 2:54 AM
@hapaga5899 What racial slurs? I don't know what story you were reading. And WC, that's not his thing.

Anonymous
8/19/21, 10:45 PM
g/psy is a slur

Anonymous
8/20/21, 3:01 AM
@Anonymous Get the fuck out of here! Gypsy is a slur, my fucking ass!
8/20/21, 2:23 AM
More, please!
8/20/21, 12:19 AM
Another great story dude! I hope the next cream makes big hairy muscle daddies!

8/20/21, 12:40 AM
@pussyboy well you're in luck....
8/19/21, 2:46 AM
Very hot. Your writing is improving, dialogue feels more naturalistic. A nice himbo transformation without the boys becoming braindead zombies, which is always a bit too far for my taste.

8/20/21, 12:37 AM
@amul Thank you! Yeah I don't particularly like the zombie thing either, I definitely prefer just dumb and horny.
8/19/21, 2:23 PM
The physical transformation is well-described, but the chapter is so short it leaves out some basic things that would have helped me enjoy the story a lot more. For instance, I didn't understand the narrator's motivations or how he planned to deal with the fact there would now be 2 Rahims walking around.

8/19/21, 4:39 PM
its a story for guys to get off to. Wasnt looking too deep for motivation other than him being a horny guy. Thought that would be enough, but thanks for the feedback! @Hypnothrill

8/20/21, 12:17 AM
@Pitmusk99 I liked the story as is. Not every story needs a ton of detail.