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8/18/21, 7:48 AM
Happy you're back. You haven't lost your touch. This isn't in the Moocows story though, I think you posted it as a stand-alone story instead of a chapter?

8/18/21, 4:31 PM
@Norismo That is odd. For some reason, the chapter format didn't take. Thanks for letting me know!
8/18/21, 4:13 PM
Lost count of the times I've cum to this - excrutiatingly hot! Though that teasing at mpreg right at the end has set my mind racing - there MUST be a sequel to explore it and of course the new rescue team. I think I've found a new fave series
8/17/21, 9:40 PM
I really like this story, but two big problems here: punctuation and uppercases are all over the place ( "ask me this **.?**", "didn't know **What** I was), some words are missing ( do you see *me* as a person or as an object), sometimes letters (an*D* only do things with me. I was the one who was supposed to *b*ring you her*e*)... So I had to stop to make sure I properly understood. I mean, English is not my first language either, but here it's getting in the way of reading. The second things is that it comes WAY too fast. Even with those explanations, nobody would forgive that easily. Even if Kai puts conditions, it still feel like he got over a lot of issues and sympathize too much with Jae. It's not credible, so I'm taken out of the story, because Jae's kind of behavior is very toxic. Even if that's the point, it doesn't come like the story criticize enough, and if it's involuntary, it means one of the character is bordering on bad guy without meaning to.

8/18/21, 4:01 PM
@BobbyBlobfish Thanks for the comment. Punctuation is something I will work on, I am not so good on it, so I will work on it. As for the second the second part, I'll try to explain and touch on that. Kai will actually still feel uneasy around Jae, and won't want to actually spend time with him, but traumatic event will bring them together, so that's all I'll say on that. I'll also touch on why Jae seems toxic, and it should give a reason as to why he may seem controlling at time in future chapter. Hope that gives you a sense of where this is going, at least a bit. I read a series on Nifty that kind of inspired me to kind of right my own, and in it the guys were somewhat what you described, and very controlling, but they still loved there partner. I kind of plan to make a series out of this, if this story goes well, so keep the comments coming.
8/18/21, 3:35 PM
Great story! I appreciated how you establish very distinct narrative voices for Lysander and the pre-conversion Toby. And this line was hilarious: "[We] only hypnotise humans under circumstances where there is no other option, for example where we need them to do something for us or if they are resisting our will."
8/18/21, 9:02 AM
INCREDIBLE! This is probably the most poetic and detailed sex scene I've ever read here; to be honest, I usually skip the sex scenes because I'm more interested in the mind control/transformation elements. But the physical descriptions and gradual warping of Zeke's mind set this apart. I also love the characterization--the idea of a politician who's been so focused on wheeling and dealing that he no longer has ideas about what he wants is brilliant. Love this!

8/18/21, 10:24 AM
@Feed Your Head So glad you enjoyed! This will be a very characterization-driven series, so stay tuned for more :)
Aug 11, 2021
Ome
8/18/21, 6:37 AM
just watched a clips how from the show and yoooo....I get it lmfao this story slaps btw
8/18/21, 6:08 AM
This is a well written story that just happens to be porn. No reliance on weak gimmicks or over the top kinky shit, just plain old good erotica. Wonderful job!
8/18/21, 6:06 AM
another way for a ex hero to be converted - and now let the master carry on using his smoke drones
8/18/21, 5:08 AM
DUDE! Or maybe that should be MATE! The story's great. I just wish there was more. The story and writing are both so outstandingly good, I feel cheated when I got to the end. I really like this character, and I want to read more of his adventure.